[Fic] [Round 1] The De-Scrooging of Gwendal von Voltaire, NC-17

[maryohki]

Author/Artist: Maryohki (aka MagicalBoyPrettyNobuyuki on fanfiction.net)
Characters/Pairings: Gwendal x Gunter
Word Count: 2,402
Rating: NC-17
Any Warnings: Seriously, this is smut. Do not read if smut is not your friend.
Theme/Prompt being used: Holiday

Comments

[lenainverse]

I really like the idea of your fic: an ill-tempered, sullen Gwendal being begrudgingly coaxed by a scheming, seductive, just a bit manipulative Gunter. ^_^

I wonder if you would like some concrit? If not, it's fine of course, I just thought I'd ask first. ^^

[maryohki]

Go right ahead~ This thing has pissed me off to no end, and I'd like to know how to improve before I go about writing anything else =3

[lenainverse]

Thanks for answering! I'm sorry to hear the fic frustrated you. :( Hopefully some of what I have to say will be helpful? *hopes*

First, as I said, I really love the Gunter-coaxing-Gwendal premise of the fic. It's a great plotbunny!! *jealous* Also, let me compliment your excellent spelling, grammar, and all that technical stuff. It's so refreshing to see something without errors! I really appreciate the time you took to edit it.

I saw your discussion below with poisonangel7 about virginity, and I really am interested by your thoughts on Gwendal being a virgin. I have to say, the idea never occurred to me, but it's really interesting to me how people get their headcanon for characters. ^_^ I guess for me, given Gwendal's standoffishness and apparent...I don't want to say fear, but perhaps discomfort...with intimacy, that he'd engage in a physical relationship before an emotional one. (And when you called Gunter "Gwendal's lover" in the beginning, it did sort of imply to me that they were already having booty calls semi-regularly, but

[maryohki]

Oh, don't worry about it! I love constructive criticism, as it's the only way I'll get better~ Thanks again =3

[maryohki]

Thanks! For some reason, I'm also curious about the KKM virginity issue. I always picture Gunter to have been the one with the most experience, followed by Yozak. (of course, this is not counting Cecile), and Gwendal to be a virgin x3.

As for the bold tags, I tried to fix them, but they're not listening to me. *shakes fist*

[maryohki]

Took me forever to fix it, but it seems to be fixed =3

x3 now I'm curious...

[crystaltear]

I haven't read too many fics of this pairing, so I was really interested in seeing how the fandom writes this dynamic. ^_^ I think you did a nice job of, despite differences in experience, keeping the relationship pretty equal, which I've always imagined would be the case with these two. I'm going to agree with comments already that Gwendal's initial description and feelings of Christmas is adorably amusing. He certainly had good reason to change his mind though!

I'm also a sucker for the little details, so the little "angel" on the tree gave me a cute chuckle, as well as Gunter incorporating his physical gifts in the middle of sex, heh. And Yozak, the evil plotter, always, hehe.

[maryohki]

x3, I'm glad you liked it~ Good old Yozak...and yes, I about died laughing at myself when writing Gwendal's apprehensions about Santa...