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[Fic] [Round 1] The De-Scrooging of Gwendal von Voltaire, NC-17

Dec 22, 2007 07:42

Author/Artist: Maryohki (aka MagicalBoyPrettyNobuyuki on fanfiction.net)
Characters/Pairings: Gwendal x Gunter
Word Count: 2,402
Rating: NC-17
Any Warnings: Seriously, this is smut. Do not read if smut is not your friend.
Theme/Prompt being used: Holiday

( And from that day on, Gwendal loved Christmas )

gwendal/gunter, gwendal, challenger - maryohki, gunter, round 001, fanfic:2007

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lenainverse December 22 2007, 14:30:29 UTC

I really like the idea of your fic: an ill-tempered, sullen Gwendal being begrudgingly coaxed by a scheming, seductive, just a bit manipulative Gunter. ^_^

I wonder if you would like some concrit? If not, it's fine of course, I just thought I'd ask first. ^^

maryohki December 22 2007, 15:06:46 UTC

Go right ahead~ This thing has pissed me off to no end, and I'd like to know how to improve before I go about writing anything else =3

lenainverse December 22 2007, 19:39:16 UTC

Thanks for answering! I'm sorry to hear the fic frustrated you. :( Hopefully some of what I have to say will be helpful? *hopes*

First, as I said, I really love the Gunter-coaxing-Gwendal premise of the fic. It's a great plotbunny!! *jealous* Also, let me compliment your excellent spelling, grammar, and all that technical stuff. It's so refreshing to see something without errors! I really appreciate the time you took to edit it.

I saw your discussion below with poisonangel7 about virginity, and I really am interested by your thoughts on Gwendal being a virgin. I have to say, the idea never occurred to me, but it's really interesting to me how people get their headcanon for characters. ^_^ I guess for me, given Gwendal's standoffishness and apparent...I don't want to say fear, but perhaps discomfort...with intimacy, that he'd engage in a physical relationship before an emotional one. (And when you called Gunter "Gwendal's lover" in the beginning, it did sort of imply to me that they were already having booty calls semi-regularly, but ( ... )

maryohki December 22 2007, 19:49:56 UTC

Oh, don't worry about it! I love constructive criticism, as it's the only way I'll get better~ Thanks again =3

maryohki December 22 2007, 19:54:40 UTC

Oh, about the "lover" thing, I think that was an edit my beta reader put in that I didn't catch DX.

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