Comments | kkm_challenge: [Fic] [Round 44] Jealousy, PG13

teef_chan in kkm_challenge

[Fic] [Round 44] Jealousy, PG13

Sep 13, 2009 17:53

Author/Artist: teef_chan
Characters/Pairings: Saralegui/Beries, Conrad
Word Count: 232
Rating: PG or PG-13 I guess
Theme/Prompt being used: Saralegui, Beries, Conrad: Unrequited

( Jealousy )

challenger - teef_chan, saralegui, round 044, beries, conrad, fanfic:2009, saralegui/beries

Comments 15

mobiuswolf September 13 2009, 23:23:17 UTC

Very nicely done.
I like your characterization for Conrad and Beries.

teef_chan September 14 2009, 00:57:55 UTC

Aw thanks, I'm glad they seemed okay! :D

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teef_chan September 14 2009, 01:00:54 UTC

Thanks! Glad you do!

I personally was thinking more it was Sara Conrad was jealous over, but I figured it could go either way. So it's left where it can be whichever the reader prefers!

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teef_chan September 14 2009, 01:40:48 UTC

Mmh, yeah there probably was. I just saw it the other way because, idk, Conrad/Sara seemed more common xD

That one where they're dancing?

Thread 6

jojo_kun September 14 2009, 02:46:26 UTC

Wow, Beries and Saralegui certainly have an intense relationship! I'm sure Conrad would feel a bit of jealousy over that, even if it's just a twinge. He and Yuuri are close, but they do keep each other at arm's length.
That was fun! ^^

teef_chan September 14 2009, 02:56:44 UTC

I'm glad you liked it! :D

^^;;; I'm not sure if I'm just misreading your comment (or if I just wasn't clear enough in the story) but Conrad's supposed to be jealous because he wanted Sara or Beries, not Yuuri.

jojo_kun September 14 2009, 06:51:15 UTC

ah, sorry. I meant it in a purely platonic sense between Conrad and Yuuri and didn't realize that it was more than that between Beries and Sara. I didn't really get the feeling that Conrad was jealous of Sara and Beries's relationship in the romantic sense. Maybe because his jealousy was generalized between the two of them and not centered on one in particular.

teef_chan September 14 2009, 10:56:33 UTC

Mmh, I think that's probably why I wasn't sure it it was really clear, but I guess that just means, yay for there being another way to take it?~ xD

ladyseishou September 14 2009, 04:15:56 UTC

What an interesting take on the prompt! Nicely put together with a twist of pathos at the end. Poor Conrad.

teef_chan September 14 2009, 10:56:54 UTC

Thanks!~ ^^

isha_libran September 14 2009, 10:46:09 UTC

Aw. Poor Conrart. But a nice twist! =)

Although, although: how could you be so mean to poor Conladdo?? D: Now write him a happy ending with Yuuri, dammit. :P

teef_chan September 14 2009, 11:02:10 UTC

Heheh, I can't help it!~ Conrad's like made for angst and stuff like that!

CONRAD GOT OVER HIMSELF AND REALIZED SARALEGUI AND BERIES ACTUALLY WERE RIGHT ABOUT HIM BEING JEALOUS CAUSE HE WANTED A RELATIONSHIP LIKE THAT WITH YUURI. BUT THEN YUURI SAID HE LOVED HIM AND THEY LIVED HAPPILY EVER AFTER WITH A PAIR OF SWANS FOR PETS.

THERE. HAPPY? IT'S TOO DAMN EARLY FOR THIS. :|

isha_libran September 15 2009, 07:28:14 UTC

Sadly, that is SO true. XD

THAT WAS BEAUTIFUL. JUST...BEAUTIFUL. *SNIFFLES*

Really? O: What time was/is it there? Coffee is your friend in situations such as these.

teef_chan September 15 2009, 07:49:15 UTC

WASN'T IT JUST? THE THRILLING, POETIC TALE OF LIES, DECEIT, UNDERSTANDING AND FINALLY PASSION PULLED TOGETHER, TO BRILLIANTLY DESCRIBE THE OUTSTANDING STRUGGLES THAT THEY FACED IN THEIR NOT SO MODERN DAY SOCIETY. BOUND TO MAKE EMOTIONS JUMP AS THE VARIETY OF TONES AND FEELINGS FLAWLESSLY BLENDED TOGETHER. AND HOW 'BOUT THEM SWANS?.

YOU KNOW A REVIEW'S THOROUGH AND TOTALLY NOT BUILDING IT UP, WHEN IT LASTS LONGER THAN THE STORY. :|

It was like 7am. I had to leave for class then :[ And I had already been up since 6. :/ I AM NOT A MORNING PERSON. AND I DESPISE COFFEE.

wtf it's almost four now and I have class tomorrow(not as early though). whhhhy am I still up? god damn graphic designers and doctor seuss STOP DISTRACTING ME.