Sora the Satanist?

[inxblot]

Dear fanbrat,

Your fic...is apparently about Sora, a Satanist wannabe who experiments with rape and doesn't understand what real Satanism is about.

Um...yeah.

I can't decide which is more OOC: Sora the evil goffik, or Sora the devout Satanist.

I mean, does THIS sound like Sora? (sorry about the formatting. That's the fic's fault, not mine.)

"Satan

Comments

[ettezag]

... Wow, a good chunk of that describes me perfectly :/ [/OT] the writing's not bad, besides the formatting. I dunno, maybe you could've picked a better example than these paragraphs, considering it just makes it look like he's confused about Satanism from an outside POV and not thinking all that in afterthought.

[rhaella]

Why are things underlined mid word? XD

Haha, nothing in that is remotely Nietzschean. Hopefully it stays that way.

[inxblot]

I know, but many kids who act like that do think it is. (ignore the above comment I made, text browsers suck.)

[shoshele04]

I actually liked the writing, it was philosophical and pretty knowledgable...but in relation to Sora? Not happening. Nice try author, find another fandom kthxbai.

[cygna_hime]

The writing would be a lot more bearable even if OOC for Sora if the constant bold, underline, and italics didn't make it look like a comic book on crack with none of the latter's visual appeal.

My soul hurts a little from typing that.

[harpie_siren]

I have to put emphasis on every bold, underlined and italicized word. It makes it sound like William Shatner or something.

[fortuna_s]

...What's worse is that I'm almost certain I've seen that first paragraph before...

Yeah, I have -_-. My friend was looking into Satanism and printed out an internet page and showed it to me. It's the EXACT SAME.

This smells like a copy and paste job. Without proper citation. FAIL.