Sora the Satanist?
Dear fanbrat,
Your fic...is apparently about Sora, a Satanist wannabe who experiments with rape and doesn't understand what real Satanism is about.
Um...yeah.
I can't decide which is more OOC: Sora the evil goffik, or Sora the devout Satanist.
I mean, does THIS sound like Sora? (sorry about the formatting. That's the fic's fault, not mine.)
"Satan represents indulgence instead of abstinence. Satan represents vital existence instead of spiritual pipe dreams. Satan represents undefiled wisdom instead of hypocritical self-deceit. Satan represents kindness to those who deserve it instead of love wasted on ingrates. Satan represents vengeance instead of turning the other cheek. Satan represents responsibility to the responsible instead of concern for psychic vampires.Satan represents man as just another animal, sometimes better, more often worse than those that walk on all-fours, who, because of his “divine spiritual and intellectual development,” has become the most vicious animal of all. Satan represents all of the so-called sins, as they all lead to physical, mental, or emotional gratification. Satan has been the best friend the Church has ever had, as He has kept it in business all these years."
"At 15 years of age, he couldn’t know any of this. He was convinced that Satanism was about heavy metal music and black shirts smelling of old blood stains and trench coats and eyeliner; about torturing kittens he found on the street, abandoned and alone and about not hesitating to expose his 5 year old brother to all sorts of nasty things. He thought that it was about hate and he thought that it was about fury and he thought that it was about war and sacrifice and lies and blackness of the heart."
How...I...guh? Maybe, maybe you could make a case for Roxas being like this, but except for the part about kindness only to those who deserve it, none of that comes close to describing Sora. I admire your knowledge of Satanism, but is a Sora-centric KH fic the best place to show it off?
Finally, fanbrat, feel free to actually use Sora's name in the fic. Except in the summary, there was not one mention of Sora's name. Just "he" over and over again.
Also, the TV Tropes Wiki now has a page on Naga Eyes (Snakes on a Sora). It needs work, so feel free to go to http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/FanFic/NagaEyes and edit it.
Your fic...is apparently about Sora, a Satanist wannabe who experiments with rape and doesn't understand what real Satanism is about.
Um...yeah.
I can't decide which is more OOC: Sora the evil goffik, or Sora the devout Satanist.
I mean, does THIS sound like Sora? (sorry about the formatting. That's the fic's fault, not mine.)
"Satan represents indulgence instead of abstinence. Satan represents vital existence instead of spiritual pipe dreams. Satan represents undefiled wisdom instead of hypocritical self-deceit. Satan represents kindness to those who deserve it instead of love wasted on ingrates. Satan represents vengeance instead of turning the other cheek. Satan represents responsibility to the responsible instead of concern for psychic vampires.Satan represents man as just another animal, sometimes better, more often worse than those that walk on all-fours, who, because of his “divine spiritual and intellectual development,” has become the most vicious animal of all. Satan represents all of the so-called sins, as they all lead to physical, mental, or emotional gratification. Satan has been the best friend the Church has ever had, as He has kept it in business all these years."
"At 15 years of age, he couldn’t know any of this. He was convinced that Satanism was about heavy metal music and black shirts smelling of old blood stains and trench coats and eyeliner; about torturing kittens he found on the street, abandoned and alone and about not hesitating to expose his 5 year old brother to all sorts of nasty things. He thought that it was about hate and he thought that it was about fury and he thought that it was about war and sacrifice and lies and blackness of the heart."
How...I...guh? Maybe, maybe you could make a case for Roxas being like this, but except for the part about kindness only to those who deserve it, none of that comes close to describing Sora. I admire your knowledge of Satanism, but is a Sora-centric KH fic the best place to show it off?
Finally, fanbrat, feel free to actually use Sora's name in the fic. Except in the summary, there was not one mention of Sora's name. Just "he" over and over again.
Also, the TV Tropes Wiki now has a page on Naga Eyes (Snakes on a Sora). It needs work, so feel free to go to http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/FanFic/NagaEyes and edit it.