A quick smut rant
Dear Ficcer,
It's nice that you're writing Xaldin/Lexaeus. Physically at least, it's the manliest Org pairing and it's very hot and also very rare. But lines like this kind of keep any of that hotness from coming through in your fic:
"The climax was splendid. Like 2 muscular, hard Greek Gods spewwing massive amounts of holy sperm.... n then it ended.."
At least you made me laugh, I guess, but I somehow doubt that was the intention.
Also, can you pick either script or prose format instead of writing an unholy mix of both? And emoticons and random net abbreviations don't belong in fic.
I'm wondering why the fic got less coherent closer to the characters' climax, was the author typing one-handed?