Brigit's Flame Week 1 May

[keppiehed]

Title: Raven
Author: Keppiehed
Rating: G
Warnings: none
Word Count: 1830
Prompt: “good omens”, first line: “There was a spark”, “verisimilitude”
A/N: This was written for week #1 at Brigits_Flame, the advanced level.

Comments

[leticiae]

Wonderful.

The myriad of emotions here are felt without overwhelming. I like how we come back to them again and again with the same sentence.

(I also like how you're transitioning your name, yes?)

[keppiehed]

What a lovely thing to say, thank you! And yes, I couldn't decide which name this week. I waffled! *is indecisive* I think people are getting so sick of keppie; I'm ready for a change, I think. Next month, maybe!

[w_x_2]

This was a very interesting read.

From the little peak into their very strong relationship at the beginning, to the separation at the end.

The emotions came through in the way that you just could not miss them.

Brilliant piece of writing as always.

'It is never enough. I will take all that you have to give and more.'

[keppiehed]

Thank you for taking the time to read this. You always make an effort with my work, and I am so grateful, I can't even tell you. I have a U/M day today, and then you are getting one massive thank you e-mail from me later today, you hear me young lady? *grins* So be prepared to hear a bunch of nice things about yourself!

[w_x_2]

Oh really don't have to thank me, I do love reading your stuff ^^

lol, you already have a massive email sitting in your account from me. I don't think I've ever written as long an email as that one.

Thanks :) *squishes you*

[keppiehed]

I'm glad you liked it. I didn't feel like it was up to snuff this week (are these tough prompts or is it just me?!) but I can't help but write anyway. You are always way too kind about my writing! Thank you.

[osoreranai]

I liked this one a lot. It does a really good job of showing their friendship without getting overly sentimental. I think I missed the part where he left, though, and I thought that might be the verisimilitude aspect you were playing at right there - where she goes back to the cave and wonders if he was ever real.

I think I see the angle now, though, and if I'm right, then that just makes it better.

[keppiehed]

I think this story could be interpreted a couple of ways, and I left it open deliberately, although maybe I shouldn't have been as vague? I struggled a little with the prompts and I think maybe it showed! It felt a little like I had too many threads going to keep it together, and I wasn't sure if it was cohesive enough to make sense. I'm glad that you liked it, even if it was a little spacey! Thanks for your comment! (and I have always adored your icon and secretly wanted to steal it!)

[osoreranai]

Nah, it was a genuine misread on my part. I went back and looked it over and, oh, there was the detail that made it work, so. (Also, you can't steal what I'd give you for free! It's yours if you want it!)

[keppiehed]

I am totally impressed that you re-read! And I think your first interpretation makes it sound artsier than I deserve, so I kind of wish I'd thought of it and want to be all smartypants and claim credit for that. As for your icon, that's so nice of you! Mine are all lame, or I'd offer you one in return. I'm not noted for my clever gifs! *wails*

[similiesslip]

Sometimes the one that seems perfect for us..still isn't meant to be:(

I am sad for Maggie..which speaks of your skill as a writer. Great job!

[keppiehed]

Thanks for taking the time to check out this older one. I feel like this month isn't going as well as last month, but I appreciate you reading my work!