Brigit's Flame Week 1 May

[keppiehed]

Title: Raven
Author: Keppiehed
Rating: G
Warnings: none
Word Count: 1830
Prompt: “good omens”, first line: “There was a spark”, “verisimilitude”
A/N: This was written for week #1 at Brigits_Flame, the advanced level.

Comments

[osoreranai]

I liked this one a lot. It does a really good job of showing their friendship without getting overly sentimental. I think I missed the part where he left, though, and I thought that might be the verisimilitude aspect you were playing at right there - where she goes back to the cave and wonders if he was ever real.

I think I see the angle now, though, and if I'm right, then that just makes it better.

[keppiehed]

I think this story could be interpreted a couple of ways, and I left it open deliberately, although maybe I shouldn't have been as vague? I struggled a little with the prompts and I think maybe it showed! It felt a little like I had too many threads going to keep it together, and I wasn't sure if it was cohesive enough to make sense. I'm glad that you liked it, even if it was a little spacey! Thanks for your comment! (and I have always adored your icon and secretly wanted to steal it!)

[osoreranai]

Nah, it was a genuine misread on my part. I went back and looked it over and, oh, there was the detail that made it work, so. (Also, you can't steal what I'd give you for free! It's yours if you want it!)

[keppiehed]

I am totally impressed that you re-read! And I think your first interpretation makes it sound artsier than I deserve, so I kind of wish I'd thought of it and want to be all smartypants and claim credit for that. As for your icon, that's so nice of you! Mine are all lame, or I'd offer you one in return. I'm not noted for my clever gifs! *wails*

[osoreranai]

Ha ha! I'm not either. But I make friends with clever people, and they let me borrow theirs for a time. They're very kind, so, I want to be kind too.