Flames

[kayden_eidyak]

Written for January week one contest on brigits_flame.

Prompt: Starting over
Word count: 400

The commas were getting the better of me this week so feel free to point out errors of their usage or lack thereof.

Flames
by Kayden Eidyak

From the ashes I was born, and ashes again I will become. The fires bred me, and the fires will consume me.

I lived in the forests of

Comments

[darlinleo]

*gasp!*
That was just lovely! So lyrical, almost like a tribal song at first!
Great use of the prompt, you.
:D

[kayden_eidyak]

Thanks very much! I'm not quite happy with all the wording, but you know how it is sometimes... If you don't put down the red marker eventually you won't have any story left.

[kayden_eidyak]

Thanks very much! That's one of my favorite lines also. :)

[more_dragoncelt]

Very pretty, I agree with darlinleo about how it's quite lyrical. :)

[kayden_eidyak]

Thanks, I appreciate it.

[osoreranai]

This does have kind of a tribal quality. I'm reminded of the werewolf mythos established by White Wolf, and each time one of their characters it always starts with "This story is true." This piece has that same quality to it.

One question - what is Moqulei? I'm just wondering if it has anything to do with the phoenix stories, since I didn't find any references to it online.

[kayden_eidyak]

Glad you liked it. Moqulei came out of my head entirely spur of the moment. I wanted the pheonixes to come from another planet, though where he is not is not necessarily Earth, either.

[cedarwolfsinger]

Beautiful phoenix imagery. Lovely work.

[kayden_eidyak]

Thank you very much!