Comments | kattahj: Supernatural fic: Now Ashes Rise in My Footprints

kattahj

Supernatural fic: Now Ashes Rise in My Footprints

Nov 20, 2006 18:22

Now Ashes Rise in My Footprints (3/3)
( In the end, he leaves the children in the car while he breaks into Josiah Blake's house. )

now ashes rise in my footprints, supernatural, fic

Comments 47

lilacsigil November 21 2006, 11:55:57 UTC

This was a great story, exciting and yet revealing of the characters at the same time. Dean's excessively early self-reliance and care for Sam is very difficult to read, as is John's grief. I loved the mechanism of the luck transfer, and the greedy flame around the statue, not to mention the brave and ruthless Melanie.

Thank you! I'm just getting into Supernatural fandom and this was really good. (I wasn't a great fan of the first season until the last few episodes, but now I'm loving it.)

kattahj November 21 2006, 16:49:06 UTC

Thanks! So glad you liked it.

Dean's excessively early self-reliance and care for Sam is very difficult to read, as is John's grief.

I choose to take "difficult" in a positive sense here. *grin* They're both so very messed up, and John does try, but... well.

I loved the mechanism of the luck transfer, and the greedy flame around the statue, not to mention the brave and ruthless Melanie.

Thank you. I don't know if "ruthless" is a word I'd choose for Melanie, though I suspect she'll grow into it with time. Either way, I'm glad she worked for you, and that the luck thing did too - I had to make something up to explain the case, and that vaguely made sense. So while Eris is genuine mythology, that rite really, really isn't. :-)

(I wasn't a great fan of the first season until the last few episodes, but now I'm loving it.)

Second season is better than much of first, even if first had some pretty good eps too.

ultraviolet9a November 21 2006, 15:42:12 UTC

Oh what a fabulous piece of work this is. Beautiful use of language and the plot could make it totally canon. And John's voice and attitude is spot on. *adoration*

kattahj November 21 2006, 16:50:25 UTC

Thank you! I'm so very glad you liked it, and that you think I captured John well. John of -85 can't quite be John of -05, but I'm happy that you think I managed to make him recognizably himself. :-)

vaznetti November 22 2006, 02:49:00 UTC

I really enjoyed this -- the way John is still feeling his way into this new world, the way he just happens into the casefile, and the way it doesn't really make anything better at all. A lot of nice little moments here.

kattahj November 22 2006, 05:19:11 UTC

Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it. And yeah, if doing stuff like this made things better for John, he wouldn't be the messed-up individual we know (and love).

cofax7 November 23 2006, 02:58:45 UTC

Oh, that was excellent. What a solid John, and you manage to create a remarkably recognizeable but silent Dean. (And I want to know why Melanie said "thank you," too!)

Poor John, fumbling his way to mastery in a field that no one recognizes.

kattahj November 23 2006, 05:35:11 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

(And I want to know why Melanie said "thank you," too!)

Hee! You're the first one who mentioned that. I have a pretty good idea why she did it, but obviously since the story's strict John POV, I couldn't fit it in. :-)

Poor John, fumbling his way to mastery in a field that no one recognizes.

I figure if he has as many cases a year as the boys, there must be hundreds (maybe even thousands) of people silently singing his praises by now. But of course, everyone else will still think he's a loser and an asshole...

elz November 23 2006, 04:14:08 UTC

Great story. I loved that John's POV was clearly different from what Dean's POV of the same events would be - that John is swept along by events and occasionally loses track of his kids and the passage of time, the way adults sadly do sometimes, even with less cause, while Dean is off in the background in his own story, doing his own thing in ways that do and don't register with John. It's a nice inversion of the show, where John is the one off in the background, whose motives and experiences are a little opaque. Plus, that's such a great subject for fic, John's shift from victim to hunter, and I liked that you let that transition play out slowly. And I really enjoyed the OCs.

kattahj November 23 2006, 05:39:09 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it - and yeah, Dean's aware in a way that Sammy isn't, and sometimes John remembers that, but sometimes he doesn't. So while John is without a doubt further warping his four-year-old as the story progresses, and Dean has all these things going on that John doesn't even know about, we get to see why John acts that way. It's not just "bad dad". Or so I hope. :-)