Comments | katcollides: Collide: Chapter three, part two

kyasuriin in katcollides

Collide: Chapter three, part two

Nov 14, 2006 00:57

ooh, shiny new part.

Title: Collide
Pairing: Remus/Sirius of Harry Potter fandom
Rating: NC-17 overall, this part is closer to PG.
Summary (for all parts): AU (Remus never went to Hogwarts). Everytime Remus gets close to someone, they start to uncover the truth about his strange disappearances and injuries. He can't stand the look on their face when ( Read more... )

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kellygreen November 14 2006, 06:42:42 UTC

No trying to involved here. <--- You're missing a 'be' or a 'get' or something here, hon. :)

Also, horse tranquilizers?! Wow, way to inform your test subjects there, Philip. "Muggle-Wizard hybrid" indeed. Poor Remus. *cuddles him*

w00t! NC-17! :D *can't wait*

kyasuriin November 14 2006, 06:46:10 UTC

ha, thanks. I actually read it through again and was like 'I'm not missing anything...' and then looked *again* and realized I was. wow. I'm slow.

thanks for commenting hun, I'd come online but I think I'm heading off to bed. *huge yawn* if you're not working tommorow night though maybe we can chat/procrastinate.

ishonn November 14 2006, 07:40:30 UTC

Ohh I love it! And I'm incredibly happy that there's still three quarters left!

Again fantastic narration and dialogues. I like how the story flows in a natural, logical way, although still not predictable enough to become boring. Also I think the way you characterise and portray both Sirius and Remus is very accurate without being cliche.

Good job again, and I'm waiting for more!

kyasuriin November 15 2006, 06:35:21 UTC

thanks so much for reading, I'm glad you're loving it. 3/4! ahhh! *grin* only kidding.

thanks so much for commenting, I'm glad you like my characterisations - sometimes when you take a character out of an environment that shapes them it can be difficult to hold on to their personality, but I'm glad it's working :)

kawaii_tenshi27 November 14 2006, 10:47:04 UTC

::cackles appreciatively:: Lovely. I do hope Remus tells Sirius straight out, instead of waiting for Sirius to figure it out on his own. Best to be direct about such things. Well, maybe not. Hmm. Well, either way, can't wait to see what happens next!

kyasuriin November 15 2006, 06:36:21 UTC

I do hope Remus tells Sirius straight out, instead of waiting for Sirius to figure it out on his own

heh, my Remus is blanching at the very idea of telling Sirius, lol. Still, hopefully he'll come to his senses soon :)

ribrust November 14 2006, 11:43:05 UTC

That little word count thing's a blessing, I'm glad I know I have plenty more of this left to enjoy.
NC-17 is like a British 18 right? Hooray.

happi_feet November 14 2006, 12:26:37 UTC

Yeah, how do you get that little wordcount thing? I can't find the codey-bit anywhere.

momebie November 14 2006, 13:49:50 UTC

Right click on the meter and find out where it came from. ;)

http://www.writertopia.com/toolbox/meters

kyasuriin November 15 2006, 06:37:24 UTC

yeah, I really can't believe that I'm only a quarter through. It feels like I've been writing this forever, lol.

And yes, NC-17 is definitely more, erm, explicit. *blush* I hope you enjoy the next part once I get it finished

secretsolitaire November 14 2006, 13:17:18 UTC

Aw. I'm such a sucker for post-transformation Remus having someone to take care of him. Glad Lily is there, and I hope Sirius treats him well (I am reassured by the possible NC-17 rating)! :-)

kyasuriin November 15 2006, 06:38:45 UTC

I'm such a sucker for post-transformation Remus having someone to take care of him

me too. I think it's because in everyday activities, he gives off a certain air of independence and self-sustainance.

ah, everyone seems to be much cheered by the NC-17 rating, lol. I suppose my muses better get themselves in gear!