All Wrong, and Yet All Right: Chapter One

[kat_elric]

Here is chapter one of my Bleach fic that I am currently writing. This chapter is HollowIchigo/Ishida. It will eventually be Ichigo/Ishida.

Comments

[bakayaromaniac]

I'm really liking this so far :D

[kat_elric]

Thanks! ^_^

[kat_elric]

Thanks! I really don't like giving things fairy tale endings because I find it very unrealistic. I think it is easier to relate to characters who don't have those sort of endings.

[fayedoll]

Very, very promising first chapter!
I found Hichigo's reaction to Ishida's plan quite surprising! Nice twist :)

[kat_elric]

Thank you.^_^

I tend to think he is a bit twisted and above all else like to screw with his "king" which in the long run was his entire intent. In a way Ishida may have played right into his hands. Of course he may not have expected Ichigo to tighten the control him.

[ruyu]

OMG. That was awesome! I agree with Ishida - he should have fallen into Ichigo's arms and they should have kissed. But, alas, they did not. It was still hot though.

I'm excited to read the next chapter!!

[kat_elric]

*giggles* Well not to give too much away but there will be falling into arms and kissing, not telling how or by who! Besides they are both a bit to awkward to do that. lol.

Thanks!

[madrona_8]

That's pretty twisted...I like it! It figures that Ishida would finally figure out how to get around Shiro.

Little spelling fix: it's semen, not seamen. ;)

[kat_elric]

Ishida does have his brains working in favor for him.

lol. Thanks for the spelling catch I fixed it I think. Somehow that was never one of my spelling words in school. ^_^

[madrona_8]

Yeah, mine either...can you imagine....? What would the sample sentence be?

[kat_elric]

Nothing appropriate, or nothing that didn't produce a wealth of childlike giggles. I think the teacher would receive more calls from parents then any teacher wants. Hey my roommate is student teaching English... I wonder if I could get her to field test this one for us...