Comments | kaisooaufest: [D89] HIDDEN TREASURE (2/2)

kaisooaufest

[D89] HIDDEN TREASURE (2/2)

Jul 14, 2016 13:39

Prompt Code: #D89
Title: Hidden Treasure

( Hidden Treasure: Part 2 )

category: d, round 1: 2016

Comments 30

anonymous July 14 2016, 11:47:15 UTC

I really like your style and wording! It seemed to fit the atmosphere of the island and gave the story a sort of dreamy feel. The only thing I personally recommend is to try and keep the POV from switching in between paragraphs, like for example when we suddenly read about Kyungsoo's or Minseok's thoughts even though we are in Jongin's head the majority of the time ( ... )

kaisoosass July 14 2016, 12:51:45 UTC

the way you wrote it is so beautiful the way you describe everything esp the island ahh <3 the writing is beautiful yet easy to understand hhhh thanks for writing this!

anonymous July 14 2016, 18:27:58 UTC

Love the beginning, all the descriptions were so real, wow!

anonymous July 14 2016, 21:20:06 UTC

This is perfect, i love it

hatfullofwinter July 14 2016, 23:05:58 UTC

Aaaa this is so sweet, i love it. Thank you this is so precious and it made my day ❤❤❤