I really like your style and wording! It seemed to fit the atmosphere of the island and gave the story a sort of dreamy feel. The only thing I personally recommend is to try and keep the POV from switching in between paragraphs, like for example when we suddenly read about Kyungsoo's or Minseok's thoughts even though we are in Jongin's head the majority of the time.
Their moments together were really really cute, especially the part where Jongin teaches him how to fish and being all gentle and sweet while Kyungsoo is just so anxious he'll do something wrong. Other than that, I kinda liked the idea of the both of them lying to each other just because they don't want to let the other go. When it was revealed Kyungsoo never had amnesia, I was just like ohhhh shit.
Minseok's feelings also made sense. I mean, it's a small island, and I reckon he probably doesn't have many other friends like Jongin. It's not weird he's scared of being replaced, especially considering the fact they spent so much time together before Kyungsoo's arrival. The only thing I'm confused about is how no one else recognized Kyungsoo or reported him to the authorities, especially since from my own experience with living in a small town everyone LOOOOOVES to gossip so no secret stays a secret for long, hahaha.
Their moments together were really really cute, especially the part where Jongin teaches him how to fish and being all gentle and sweet while Kyungsoo is just so anxious he'll do something wrong. Other than that, I kinda liked the idea of the both of them lying to each other just because they don't want to let the other go. When it was revealed Kyungsoo never had amnesia, I was just like ohhhh shit.
Minseok's feelings also made sense. I mean, it's a small island, and I reckon he probably doesn't have many other friends like Jongin. It's not weird he's scared of being replaced, especially considering the fact they spent so much time together before Kyungsoo's arrival. The only thing I'm confused about is how no one else recognized Kyungsoo or reported him to the authorities, especially since from my own experience with living in a small town everyone LOOOOOVES to gossip so no secret stays a secret for long, hahaha.
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