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5x5 Prompt: Not the Same

Aug 23, 2006 09:53

Title: Not the Same
Prompt: #21 Equivalent
Author: just_unravel
Disclaimer: I'm not even going to pretend I own these characters. Not even Jayne.
Rating: PG
Warnings: Character death. I am also in an angsty mood.

( there is no equivalent )

prompt, fanfiction, firefly, rayne

Comments 14

jayneswoman August 23 2006, 17:12:06 UTC

Woah! Talk about a Sixth Sense-esque (is that a word? well it is now!!) twist at the end...

Another angsty, let's kick Jayne where it hurts
fanfic. Lovely. Beautifully written. I'm turning into a real angst hag!!! LOL

just_unravel August 23 2006, 17:15:43 UTC

Jayne seems to be getting kicked when he's already down a lot lately, huh? I'll try to make up for it eventually.

thanks for the compliments. =)

icebreather August 23 2006, 21:57:54 UTC

Cruel! That was cruel! But clever in its diabolicalness. *bows in admiration*

just_unravel August 23 2006, 23:26:20 UTC

I was cruel wasn't I? I think the Los Angeles drivers pissed me off too much this morning if this was the result.

you bowed? *warm fuzzy feelings* thanks a bunches

lattelady6 August 23 2006, 22:10:09 UTC

You sent my angst level through the ceiling with that one. The last line is the kicker. Well written to have pulled out so many emotions with so few wordes.

just_unravel August 23 2006, 23:27:04 UTC

I did warn about the angst. Don't know why I had this in my head, but it all just kinda came out. Not to worry, I'll make it up to Jayne.

lattelady6 August 23 2006, 23:53:12 UTC

You could be extra nice and make it up to Mal and Inara too. I ship both pairings big time.

neroli66 August 23 2006, 22:53:18 UTC

*cries for River*
*cries more for Jayne*
*scrubs brain to cleanse it of the Mal/River icky*

Beautifully written! And I love the twist at the ending, even if it does bring up the one pairing in this fandom that makes me go EWWW...LOL

just_unravel August 23 2006, 23:28:03 UTC

Thank you. I understand how the Mal/River ship is just...eww.... Usually, I am the same, but I had this in my head and had to get it out.

neroli66 August 23 2006, 23:41:09 UTC

And I am glad you did!

I'm not sure why Mal/River has such a strong ick for me when I can handle CSI just fine...LOL

angel932 August 24 2006, 01:25:38 UTC

Great little fic, although I usually don't read Mal/River because I just can't see it for some reason. But I liked this, especially the neat little twist. :)