"Holding My Breath" -remix of ununoriginal's fic

[lastingdreams8]

Title: Holding my Breath
Writer: dark3princess
Rating: G
Group/Pairing: NEWS; Nishikido Ryo x Kato Shigeaki
Warnings/Genre: Very slight mention of domestic violence
Author's Note: This is my first remix ever, so I hope you'll enjoy it and provide feedback on how I should improve:) Beta read by madpig4life
Links to Original Story, Original Writer: There Won’t Be Any

Comments

[ununoriginal]

&hearts&hearts&hearts&hearts&hearts&hearts&hearts&hearts

this was a really gorgeous remix! i love how u added in shige's point of view and showed more of the actual interactions of their r/ship. and i really liked how u brought it back to the wedding dress, and how tat was the point tat marked a breakthru in ryo's thinking :)

Shige doesn’t know how to broach the subject that’s hanging heavily in the air, and he doesn’t know how to tell him that he understands, and that he loves him because of who he is, and that he doesn’t have to be afraid to be that person.

LOVED this. definitely my favourite line :)

thanks so much for writing such a lovely thing *HEARTS u*

[lastingdreams8]

Yokatta! :D
*Glomps* I'm super excited that you pointed out those parts ^^
Your comment made my day!!!
♥

[ex_mrsattert963]

whoa whoa whoa freaky that you remixxed one of the five-odd NewS/ryoshige fics I've ever read o_o I really liked the somewhat somber tone of the original one, and I really like the slight switch you did by leaning towards Shige's POV more!

you started off the story with some nice tension, and i like how it slowly unwound to the end. Nice job!

(and you got it beta'd! *throws hearts, stars, love*)

[lastingdreams8]

HAHA lol, it must be ESP:D
I'm glad you liked it ^^
haha-yes. I was a good child and got it beta'd, since I was done so early:)

[tokeruyouna]

All the interaction between Ryo and Shige was just so perfectly balanced between them and with the rest of the story. Really liked!

[lastingdreams8]

Thanks for the comment:)
I'm glad I managed to keep it balanced:)

[indian_monsoon]

Fantastic fic. I loved the original, and this is sort of the perfect remix to it. Everything was lovely, and i love how you managed to capture the mood from unun's story so perfectly.

Great job!

[lastingdreams8]

Thanks for the awesome comment! :D

[kougazgurl]

That was really amazing! I love how you put in Shige's point of view and how Shige understood. Also, your aspect on Ryo's side of the situation, the confusion to the comfortable-ness was truly amazing. I loved this. It was a good, if not perfect remix.

[lastingdreams8]

Thank you for the lovely comment!
This totally made me happy:D