LJI Entry: Skeleton Crew

[jem0000000]

LJI Week 30: Critical Hit

Comments

[i_17bingo]

I want to kill some skeletons! Where do *I* find a store like this?!

[jem0000000]

I think it's actually something like an amusement park -- I'm not sure, originally it started out as a behind-the-scenes look at a day in the life of a skeleton working as a generic bad guy for a video game, and then it turned into this.

(Although I'm afraid you got the first-draft version; I posted it so that I could edit it with my phone while I was on break at work.)

[fodschwazzle]

I love the sense of speed in this piece. But, more importantly, does this place exist? Because this sounds both awesome and plausible (except maybe the sharks as I perceive them). I really felt like this conveyed the magic of acting, especially: those quick decisions that need to be made just to maintain momentum and believability for the audience.

Also, "That means it's dead," is an incredibly funny line.

[jem0000000]

Thank you! :D That's exactly what I was going for -- speed and maintaining a facade for the audience -- and I'm really glad it worked for you

[witches]

your writing is always so enchanting to me :3

[jem0000000]

Thank you! :)

[bleodswean]

The dialogue in this is really nice. It works, it moves, it individuates your characters!

[jem0000000]

Thank you.