So Much Mine: Section Eight

Nov 13, 2006 21:46

Pairing: JaeHo
Rating: Overall NC-17 (This section... possibly R?)
Hot chocolate and bunnies provided by: Ranalore
Summary: Section Eight.
The beginning of a shifting relationship. Hot Korean boys. Sex. Dancing and some angry words. Not necessarily in that order. Not necessarily in each section.

Section One; Section Two; Section Three; Section Four; Read more... )

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bellasurus November 14 2006, 05:48:18 UTC
MEEEEE

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bellasurus November 14 2006, 05:55:49 UTC
JAEHO LOCKED IN XDDDD

There was a secret hovering just at the edge of Jae’s heart, a spilling of desires rushing into a foolhardy tide that would consume his life if he whispered his need to Yunho.

tell him!!!! *flails*

Something in the forlorn cast aside hoodie, worn nearly thin from Yunho’s body, called to Jaejoong and he folded it under his shirt, often moving it around in his dresser until he was sure the other young man had forgotten its existence. It had since become a beloved thing, worn when he wanted to feel the warmth of Yunho’s presence around him.

so that's the secret of the hoodie. awwwwww *melts into a puddle*

jaejae has eight sisters ^^ and he's prettier than all of them XP

his tongue aching to just take a small lick or nip his teeth against the depression, perhaps even drawing a circle of moisture with a damp finger…just to see the reaction on Jae’s face.

do it!! doitdoitdoit!

“There’s nothing more that I want than to be… with all of you. Nothing else that can make me complete. I’ll do anything…be anything ( ... )

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wedspawn November 14 2006, 06:12:53 UTC
:::grins::: i changed it to many. i realized i don't know how many he had to share the bathroom with :) i am assuming you liked it ::::more grins:::: ♥♥♥♥

i think jaeho will happen in an actual bed. :) i dunno. we'll have to see :)

i am so very happy you liked it. moving from the angst ... sorta... to the jaehoness of it all. maybe? yes?

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bellasurus November 14 2006, 06:28:27 UTC
actual bed, with rose petals and pristine white silk sheets and al;kdgjhsldkfjhg i hope it comes like, in the next few chapters because I WANT NOW. XD

yes! there's less angst now ^^ and it seems like they're converging ♥

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audient November 14 2006, 06:14:09 UTC
...second?!

WHAT IS THIS SH--

I will be back with a decent review.

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wedspawn November 14 2006, 06:19:41 UTC
many ♥♥♥♥♥s :)

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audient November 14 2006, 09:05:25 UTC
You. Always. Leave us with the best line in the whole section :')

"I need to have you in my life. Even if it breaks me."

That line owned me. Really.

The sentimental value of the hoodie also gave out a warmth to JaeJoong's personality; one, I believe, we haven't seen (not too much anyway) in the whole story so far xD so it was refreshing and endearing at the same time. I love it. The description, too :3 That and YunHo's evaluation of JaeJoong's personality in early DBSK days.

The other thing that immediately caught my attention was YunHo's half-but-not-quite apology :] It's sweet, somehow. I don't know whether you meant to write short, simple dialogs or not ("I'm sorry. I'm not trying to hurt you."), but they (and the underlying meaning, of course) came off that way to me. His apology, Jae's confession, and they were... aish. I just love them.

And of course, the bathroom quip :') That one's just precious.

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wedspawn November 14 2006, 15:27:25 UTC
thank you! more ♥♥♥!

i am trying to sort of tell two stories... one that is on the surface of the words and one that will be apparent if you've already ready it once and then go back over, knowing some of the details. small things... like the jacket. now that you know why it's so important to jae, even if it's a small point, going back to read the sections again, i hope you see the allegory of its importance and how often it's just a subnote to the story. and i'm totally making it larger than it really is. :::grins::: it is really just a small point :)

i needed to write short dialogues because right now, they are barely talking...stilted in how they speak. and yes, there are underlying meanings in what yunho is saying and he probably doesn't even realize it. his heart is speaking through the words his mind thinks needs to be said...but with different meanings.

i'll have to see where jae's words lead them :)

thank you for following along! i am very happy you're liking it.

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forcus November 14 2006, 06:17:25 UTC
awww. A nice chat. Cant wait to see where it goes!

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wedspawn November 14 2006, 06:27:52 UTC
me too! thanks for following along! ♥

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wedspawn November 14 2006, 06:27:15 UTC
i knew what you meant! :::grins::: i "saw" the italics.

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xiaobai7988 November 14 2006, 06:57:08 UTC
*__* I love your descriptions, especially the old office~ I can actually picture out the scene in my mind. Brilliant~!

And once again, I love the tension that is jaeho~ I felt as though I'm standing in the office with them and feeling the suffocating tension (just like how junsu, changmin and yoochun might be feeling)...there's so much unspoken words and thoughts that should be said, but none of them is ready to do so. Jae is being utterly straightforward though, even if there's some important stuff that he didn't want to say. That last line reflects the jae that doesn't care about the consequences of his words.

*__* I bow down once again to your words and your dialogue. Shall wait impatiently again for the next chapter!

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wedspawn November 14 2006, 15:09:34 UTC
thank you! i truly appreciate your kind words and i'm glad you find the piece readable! ♥♥♥

i have to see if i'll have time or the brain to write today. i think my little brain cells are gasping for air! :)

i do hope that jae comes across very straightforward even if he doesn't want to open up all the way. yunho is being a bit dense but that's good for storytelling :) or so i'm telling myself.

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