In The Morning. Naruto Fanfic.

[ivy_tsuta]

Alright, time to get back on track after a super long hiatus. Now that I finally finished reshaping my profile without getting too complicated. So, I'm gonna start off with posting a personal favorite I wrote. I like this story the best, even though it is sickeningly short, in my taste

Comments

[jade_wynds]

Ooooh, sad! I'm a little bit confused as to the premise. Did Hinata ask Naruto to spend the night with her? Why? Why did he agree? Does Sakura know? I think a little more backstory would add to the poignancy of Hinata's situation. That and I'm a curious bastard :)

As far as the story goes, it was definitely an interesting take on Hinata's character, regardless. She seemed a lot more assertive, but inwardly so. Perhaps a little less explanation of her feelings. It's something I do a lot too, so I think I'm super-tuned to it now. But otherwise, good.

Oh, before I forget, tiny typo in the first line: "Naruto already explain it to her." Should explain be explained?

[ivy_tsuta]

Yeah, Hinata suddenly grew bold and asked Naruto to 'spend the night' with her. I was gonna make another chapter from Naruto's perspective, but the idea never got started right, so I put it off. I always think about doing it, but it never starts out right. Who knows, it might have been good. xD
Sakura doesn't know since it's just a one night thing. And as I said before, the plot would have been in later chapters, but, eh, I'm lazy. So unmotived.

Does that type of character fit Hinata? I wasn't sure, but as she grew she knew that it was never gonna happen, so she decided to not be regretful this one time. Oops, to many feelings inserted? I'll remember that, it's just when I write I want as many emotions to be conveyed as possible, but I usually over do it.

Thanks. And back to your sharp eye, hm? :) Yes, it should be. I'll fix it.
Ah, I never expected to get a review from you. This calls for a super happy face. =DD
He doesn't look happy enough, but oh well. Just remember, I'm happier than him.