[WC Fic] "Cake or Death", rated PG-13 (Part 1 of 1)

[ivorysilk]

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Title: Cake or Death
Author: Ivorysilk
Rating: PG
Characters: Elizabeth, Neal, Peter, and a bit of Mozzie and June
Word Count: About 4500
Spoilers: None, and everything up to season three, really.
Summary:
As soon as Elizabeth Burke left the shop, Mozzie turned to him and hissed, "You are way out of your

Comments

[hoosierbitch]

OKAY.

ITEM #1: YOU ARE RIDICULOUS FOR EVER THINKING THAT I WOULD NOT LIKE THIS.
ITEM #2: YOU CANNOT TELL ME ABOUT SCENES THAT ARE IN THIS THAT YOU DID NOT WRITE, WITHOUT ONE DAY WRITING THEM.
ITEM #3: YOU RIDICULOUS AWESOME TEASE.
ITEM #4: THIS COMMENT IS TOO LONG TO FIT INTO JUST ONE BOX.

The directions to the bakery were unnecessarily complicated, but when Elizabeth typed the address into her iPhone, it appeared to be no more than a ten minute walk from her office. She frowned. From what Yvonne said, it had seemed like it would take an age. I love this because it's exactly what I would do in Yvonne's place.

“Oh,” said Neal, glancing at the scene distracting Elizabeth. “Mozzie’s in a white phase right now, and Victor keeps bringing out the red bowls. He’s June’s nephew, but she might fire him--she’s not convinced he’s going to last.” This is one of my favorite parts--you didn't just include different bits from different episodes, you adapted them all perfectly so that it expands this new universe. ALSO I LOVE MOZ.

“Vanity!”

[hoosierbitch]

Want me to strut my stuff upstairs? Peter IS really bad at flirting. WE ALL LOVE HIM FOR IT.

“I’d like to meet him,” said Peter.

“I’d like that,” said Elizabeth, and somehow, as she said the words, it felt right. Like a relief. This mini-resolution is such a relief for her, and for the reading audience, and it just makes me appreciate Elizabeth & Peter's relationship even more.

“Whereas you, Mrs. Burke,” and June very delicately stressed the honorific, “have a husband, a family, a network of friends. None of whom have ever met Neal. And Neal looks a lot stronger and more confident than he might actually be.” It was really hard to pick which bit of this was my favorite, because I love this whole scene, but I thought that if I copied & pasted it, I'd go over the character limit.

“Okay, okay, calm down. What’s he into?”

“Sexually?” HEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE I LOVE THIS. AND I LOVE THAT SHE FORGOT HIS BIRTHDAY. AND USUALLY THERE IS LINGERIE. (...THERE SHOULD BE POST-CAKE-POP LINGERIE. IT CAN EVEN BE EDIBLE

[ivorysilk]

You are awesome, and I am really happy you liked it -- as you know. I will also write you the other fic too! Really really. :-)

Thank you for the amazing comments! You are the best :-)

[daria234]

Mmm delicious in both senses of the word. I love the dialogue, especially from Mozzie :) and the UST we can tell just from how Neal looks from Peter's and El's pov. Great fic!

[ivorysilk]

Thank you! I'm really glad you enjoyed it :-)

[arsenicjade]

Aw, this is adorable and sweet and contains lovely insecure!Neal and protective!June, and the way you switch certain canon elements is awesome.

[ivorysilk]

Thanks, bb! I had some fun trying to weave it into canon, even as I despaired of ever getting it to make sense to anyone but me. :-)

[ultracape]

Adorable. And I'm all for Neal wanting to keep his $100 shirts dirt free, as often as possible.

[ivorysilk]

As am I. Possibly, he should do more things that might risk his shirts, frequently :-).

[nieseryjna]

whooha this is FANTASTIC!! And I wont moooore , there have to be more, you can't just leave it like that!

[ivorysilk]

Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it! I was so stressed getting it done, I could not see past the "phew, I'm done!" but I suppose, one day ... *g* Thanks for commenting!