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[itsarift_thing]

OMG! I am so taking liberties with my own comm *apologises*

Title: Serenity
Author: mad_jaks
Characters: The Ninth Doctor, the crew of Serenity
Genre: Ficlet, gen
Rating: G
Prompt: consci_fan_mo: aeron_lanart wanted, Firefly/Doctor Who; Mal, Doctor (any incarnation); box
Summary: The Doctor needs somewhere to recover - where better than a ship called Serenity?
Notes: Pre-"Safe

Comments

[redwolf]

I adore it, but there seems to be bits missing... Scenes are there but not fully explained. A bit of a tease. Was it meant to be 2,000 exactly and you had to cull it back?

[itsarift_thing]

You adore it?

HIgh praise indeed. Thanks

The word limit in consci_fan_mo was 2000 words.
And when I sat down to write it wasn't that big at all but wow it wanted to get HUGE! And you know me, I do not write long stuff so-

Not so much culled as avoided - there are scenes and whole conversations (in my head) that did not make it to the page simply because of the word limit.

[redwolf]

That explains why it reads like stuffs missing. It's all in your head and the word limit truncated it.

The TARDIS arriving on Serenity is familiar to a couple of other stories I've run across, but you have a small blue box appearing in the tiny geographic space of a small ship, so you're pretty much limited to the cargo hold and a surprised crew. Sticking the TARDIS elsewhere just relocates the scene, but it's not going to be able to sneak aboard. It's a frustrating constraint.

However, from there it forks nicely and I'm left with the tease of a really fascinating premise that doesn't have chance to breath. I hate when big stories sneak up on you and you're forced to trim them.

[itsarift_thing]

The TARDIS materialising like that pretty much standard on Who really isn't it? SO I wasn't too bothered about that - I reckon she chose Serenity for a reason so she was going to go straight there...

Big stories don't normally sneak up on me - I was majorly confused. This one may turn out to be the one I finally find myself dipping into and adding missing scenes to next year. Maybe I should turn it into aproject or something? I don't know!

There's definitely one between Nine/Mal after Kaylee has left where they get comfortable and there's also a heck of a lot more that goes on between Nine and River as well.

[topgeargirl2]

really good

[itsarift_thing]

thanks :D

[aeron_lanart]

Take as many liberties as you want... I got a fic for my prompt out of it after all! And this is wonderful. Your first Firely fic? Fantastic!!! I've always chickened out of writing Firefly much as I adore it as I can't hear the characters well enough to write them (except for maybe Simon).

I actually rather like the fractured scene-jumping, it gives hints and snippets while providing a platform for imagination to take a flying leap from. And this way you can see the scenes as they would be on the tv. Or I think you can anyway.

And this bit?

“She's saved my life more than once. Is your girl good?”

“My girl? You mean Serenity? Why she's a fine-” The Doctor raised an eyebrow at him, cutting him off. “Oh, Kaylee? She's not-”

“The Captain forgets she's a girl,” Simon put in quietly, not lifting his head.

“She forgets she's a girl!” Mal countered, straightening up.

Perfect! You put the biggest smile on my face.

Right then, I shall stop gushing effusively and be off to read it again. *mems*

[itsarift_thing]

HEE! glad it pleased you. Nope never written Firefly - I've read a small amount but that's all.
except for maybe Simon
That's odd he's the one I find hard to hear - even though he's erm... the one that's most like a 'normal' person, if you know what I mean?

[unfeathered]

This is fantastic! The whole crew there - all perfectly written and in character and contributing to the story, even if only a little. And I'm squeeing over Kaylee fixing up the TARDIS. That's just perfect!

[itsarift_thing]

*adores your icon*

Kaylee fixing up the TARDIS was always going to happen - so much of her skill is understanding what Serenity is 'telling' her is wrong/needs fixing - think how much easier that would be when you're dealing with a ship that *can* actually communicate :D

And woah! juggling that many people is *tough* so I'm glad you thought I managed to pull it off!

[unfeathered]

(Bugger. I typed this comment hours ago and just realised I obviously never clicked 'post'!)

Hee - I love this icon too! (And it's my only Firefly one.) I always feel Kirk should be in there too, though, you know? *g*

I think Kaylee would get on incredibly well with the TARDIS. The TARDIS would probably want her to come along afterwards - you know, "At last, someone who actually cares and fixes me properly!"

[itsarift_thing]

And then Kaylee would have to let her down gently because her she'll always be Serenity's girl :D

[padawanpooh]

Beautifully written- Nine/Firefly works so well.

You've set up some lovely scenes and I for one would love to see what else you can think of for this scenario - maybe you could write some drabbles/ficlets set during Nine's stay on Serenity?

:-)

[itsarift_thing]

Thank you. I reckon Nine and Mal would definitely forge a bond.

maybe you could write some drabbles/ficlets set during Nine's stay on Serenity?
I was just saying to redwolfoz that this might be the one that I finally do just that with in 2009. Of course, you know what an abject coward I am so it will probably involve you lot hounding me mercilessly to do it if you *really* want it done.