Fic: Everything Passing By Is Not Coming Back

[insanityclings]

Title: Everything Passing By Is Not Coming Back
Spoilers: through 9x22 Salvation
Rating: PG (for references to death)
A/N: Chloe's perspective during the "I love you" scene. Title from Vast's "Everything Passing By Is Not Coming Back". 303 words.

Comments

[fickery]

This is just wonderful. The last two lines are heartbreaking but I think this line is my favorite:

She wasn’t supposed to find herself in him.

Very intense and affecting for such a short piece. Beautiful job.

[insanityclings]

Thank you so much. I'm really glad you like that line because I was trying to find a way to express how much she loved him without actually saying it.

[ihearttvsnark]

Aw, this is so good! It's very well written and I can feel Chloe's inner turmoil. Great job.

[insanityclings]

Thank you. I'm glad you could feel her inner turmoil because I thought the little pause before she tells him she loves him needed an explanation and for me it was because she was going through serious grief and panic in that moment.

[sarcastic_bite]

Wow, that was really great. You write Chloe so well.

[insanityclings]

Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it.

[awesomegeek]

Amazing. You really felt for Chloe through it all and the end is so sad. Loved it!

[insanityclings]

Thanks. I'm really glad you enjoyed it even if it was sad.

[smallvillefics]

Loved the last two lines - such a perfect summary.

[insanityclings]

Thank you so much. I'm really glad you liked it.