opening of "Generation" (SPN fic)

[innie_darling]

Hi, everybody

Comments

[barkley]

Oh, this is awesome! I am looking forward to more.

[innie_darling]

I want to know what happens next too! I just want the time to write this!

Thanks!

[saberivojo]

This is going to be something. I like how accurate you portray the kids. They are kids, Nanners and grubby hands. Screamin in tubs. I love John here too, He is an ordinary man in extroidinary circumstances. He is trying to make his way with two small children and the burden of Mary's death. Not a drunk or neglectful Dad. I have a sense of him still kind of shell shocked. I like too some of the things that are surfacing early on, Dad's dependence on Dean. Sam's dependence on Dean.

The backstory on Bobby is great. I love his wife and the gentle way she has with Dean.

I hope you continue on with it.

[innie_darling]

I'm so pleased that the boys seem like real children to you - I based some of their behaviors on what I remember of me and my little brother, and on my two small nephews.

Malai and Dean just tug at my heartstrings - I love them together.

Thank you so very much!

[roadtriptime]

I really like the world you're building here and how we get perspective on Dean, Sam, and Bobby through John's eyes.
I always did wonder how Bobby and John first came into contact.

I look forward to reading the rest of your story!

[innie_darling]

I really liked trying to puzzle out a plausible first meeting for John and Bobby, and it finally clicked that I could use Jim as a conduit. I'm still not entirely sure if that's plausible, so I'm glad it worked for you!

Thanks!

[azephirin]

This is so good. John's typically a hard sell for me, but I found him interesting and heartbreakingly sympathetic here. The kids are also really accurate: Sammy pointed at the honey and demanding, "Dat!" made me smile as I remembered the same thing from my brother and cousins. Can't wait to read the rest!

[innie_darling]

Yay, I'm so glad all of this worked for you! I started the story thinking of it as the John part of the trilogy of "Lacuna" (Dean) and "Sunshine State" (Sam), but it's becoming increasingly clear that "Generation" is not just John's story - it's the story of the three of them, together and apart.

[lomer]

Before I get to the heartbreak that's the end of this WiP, I've got to say I adore your wee!Dean. I spent much of today playing with a three year old so those scenes with little Dean rang especially true. Three year olds are a lot smarter then many people write them as. You actually let little Dean be a real person and not just a characture of "cute."

And oh John... the poor guy wants Dean to be happy but doesn't want to taint Mary's memory with a "new mom" and that's just a whole mess right there. And then Malai doesn't surive and neither does the baby...oh Bobby. Really wonderful story. I can't wait to read more!

[innie_darling]

I'm especially gratified that little Dean seemed real to you - he's based on me, my brother, and my two nephews. I just love him so.

And I'm pleased that the choices John makes seem convincingly difficult to you. Thank you so much for letting me know!