Comments | icedteainthebag: fic: Games Adults Play (5/6)

icedteainthebag

fic: Games Adults Play (5/6)

Oct 03, 2011 19:18

Title: Games Adults Play (5/6)
Author: icedteainthebag
Pairings: Bill Adama/Ellen Tigh/Laura Roslin, think square dancing + Saul, Adama/Roslin
Rating: Um, super MA
Summary: Ellen's return to the Fleet brings complications to Bill and Laura's lives.
Word Count: 4,500
Notes: Written for the bsg_epics ship swap exchange in order to fulfill wishflsinfl's request of Bill/Laura/Ellen, ( Read more... )

+ a partridge in a pear tree, laura/ellen, bsg_epics, bill/ellen, bsg, bill/ellen/laura, fic: games adults play

Comments 20

wishflsinfl October 4 2011, 01:02:49 UTC

I'm speechless. I just read this on my phone, in a public place and now I know how you felt when I sprang Gaius and Laura on you at work. : O

I'll be back tomorrow with detailed comments but know that I think this is amazing. It's hot and beautiful and a little harrowing and so complex. You found such an original angle to come at this scene and just nailed it.

I absolutely love it.

icedteainthebag October 4 2011, 02:32:10 UTC

You and your public porning! How does it feel? Don't answer that...

Thank you so much for the comment. Now I can go to bed happy.

wishflsinfl October 4 2011, 22:26:48 UTC

Hey, I can't help it if you posted this when I wasn't home! I sure as hell wasn't going to wait two hours to read it.

You know, of all the ways I imagined you might make this sex scene happen (and there were many) this wasn't one of them. Not even close. The way you surprised me made me stupidly happy.

The contrast between the hot, dirty, primal fucking at the beginning and the intimacy that follows after Ellen leaves is incredible. It's undeniably hot and there's so much more going on. You really have done the impossible in making this work and keeping the characters in character.

A spark of determination flickered across the woman's face. "I've done this before."

The competitiveness between Laura and Ellen works so well. I love that they're both upping the ante until it's too late to turn back and obviously both a little turned on by the power struggle and the fact that Bill is watching the whole thing. And Bill is such a guy, not wanting to pass up the chance to see them frakking.

He savored it and then pulled away, licking ( ... )

somadanne October 4 2011, 23:42:57 UTC

I sure as hell wasn't going to wait two hours to read it.

Hee! I decided I had to wait until my kids went to bed, and that seemed to be hours and hours after I saw the post go up, though it actually wasn't.

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icedteainthebag October 4 2011, 12:54:03 UTC

The mood just evolved in such a wonderful, organic way that I was completely swept away with it.

♥ ♥ ♥ That's all I have to say about that. I didn't want to feel like I was forcing anything. It was really hard. Seriously when I post the outtakes for this fic of which there were several you will see how many scenarios I had to go through to get this to work.

You know, there has been a ton of great fic lately. It's so nice to see. And thank you. That means a lot to me and I'm so happy you've enjoyed this story.

mary_me11 October 4 2011, 06:25:46 UTC

I got up earlier than necessary so I could read the new chapter before work…and now I will be tiered the whole day, but it was so worth it!!!!!
At first I was surprised when Ellen stayed and even more surprised when Bill actually started to touch her , but only because I wasn’t sure if he would have such great stamina at his age and his state of drunkenness…LOL!!?!? Good to know I don’t need to worry if you write the storyline!!!!!
Too sad that there will be only one more chapter…..

icedteainthebag October 4 2011, 12:55:42 UTC

but only because I wasn’t sure if he would have such great stamina at his age and his state of drunkenness…LOL!!?!?

LOL! I thought of this last night when re-reading what I posted. But let's just pretend Bill is a little bit of romance super hero and the fifteen minutes or so with Laura in the shower invigorated him :D

It tickles me that you got up early to read the new chapter and you thought it was worth it. Thanks for following along and leaving such great comments. :)

larsfarm77 October 4 2011, 13:41:25 UTC

Wow. I read this last night and I'm still kinda blown away by the HOT. But not just hot, complicated, too. There was something, I don't know how to define it, about Laura and Bill frakking by proxy through Ellen. It's fucked up, but it really works, and I loved that you didn't sweeten Ellen's intentions at all. She defeated Bill; she removed some of the classy, Presidential shine from Laura and won there, too. And I liked it :D.

I also loved that this 'oh so wrong but so hot' transition brings Bill and Laura to where they ultimately want to be, and I loved how they moved from awkward to comfortable. It felt so right.

But it was this:

"Bill, I want to show you something."

that killed me. In the absolute BEST way possible.

Awesome job, (((you))). I know it was a huge struggle!

icedteainthebag October 4 2011, 14:37:05 UTC

Thank you for your comment. It was a lot of fun to write... like jumping off the cliff and not knowing whether the water below you is deep enough. That kind of fun.

I'm glad you found the awkward/comfortable transition right. Bill and his wonder penis got two ladies in like an hour that night. I am envious.

(((you))) Augh, thank you, it is over now. lol. :)

somadanne October 4 2011, 23:36:43 UTC

This was uncomfortably hot--and I mean that in any way you'd like to define "uncomfortable." The drunk frakking is so wrong, and yet the connection here between Bill and Laura while he's frakking Ellen was wickedly hot.

Laura's "I've done this before," while surprising, was so perfectly said, and so perfectly right here in this situation. And I believed it.

Ellen is so wonderfully ... Ellen here.

I always love the emotional depth you bring to these characters, and you've done that so well in these scenes here. And I love that you're willing to go so many places with characters and that you can make it work.

There are so many good lines here--wishflsinfl already quoted pretty much the same ones I would have.

I'm just rambling now, but I loved the intimacy at the end--that Bill and Laura's first kiss in this scene comes after Ellen leaves was wonderful, and the intimacy between these two after the threesome really, really works so well.

And now I can't wait to read the next chapter!

icedteainthebag October 5 2011, 02:24:12 UTC

Thank you for all the feedback. I'm so glad to have this done and posted and especially glad you are reading it and enjoying it. Thanks for rambling about everything you liked... it's really good to hear what worked for you. I'm especially happy it seems people were digging the intimacy between Bill and Laura after the frakfest.

yet the connection here between Bill and Laura while he's frakking Ellen was wickedly hot.

Yeah, it took "I only have eyes for you" to a whole new strange level. :)

Thanks for all your suggestions, namely to have them get drunk. :) (((you)))