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[story] that beautiful apple

Feb 01, 2009 00:01

author: mellish (scratchmist)
email: scratchmist [at] yahoo.com

( They bumped into each other one day in summer. )

author: mellish, book 13: erase/rewind, story

Comments 10

thanatophilia February 1 2009, 17:37:41 UTC

Very cute ~&hearts

scratchmist February 8 2009, 11:29:43 UTC

Thanks for reading :D

star_flare February 2 2009, 05:59:38 UTC

I kind of feel like an idiot for not getting it at first, and just wondering where this story was going, until he said he was Adam. XD Taxonomy was a nice touch~

scratchmist February 8 2009, 12:21:21 UTC

Thanks, I had a fun time putting in taxonomy. ^^x Um, since you said it would be interesting to see a rewrite (since I'm entertaining the idea), do you have any specific suggestions for revision?

littlekasumi February 4 2009, 00:13:33 UTC

I did not get the obvious reference until the very end and I facepalmed at my awesome skills of observation. But I still loved this regardless! =)

scratchmist February 8 2009, 12:22:19 UTC

It's true, it was pretty vague. ^^x I'm glad the ending was able to clarify it though. Thank you so much for reading!

sensitise February 17 2009, 07:16:28 UTC

I loved it, and more so as it progressed. ♥ Good job.

scratchmist February 17 2009, 12:12:51 UTC

Thank you very much! :D

wordsofastory September 16 2009, 17:03:03 UTC

Oh, this is wonderful. I love how this works as a sequel, almost, to the original story. And, oh! The little details! Taxonomy and leaf skirts! Fantastic story.

scratchmist September 28 2009, 15:56:35 UTC

Thank you very much, I'm so glad you read and enjoyed. :) ♥