[story] seafoam

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author: mellish (scratchmist)
email: scratchmist [at] yahoo.com

Comments

[uminohikari]

I tried to leave 2 comments, but LJ decided to die both times >>;;

I loved the original little mermaid, and I was just looking for stories based on it, so this story made me very happy!
Very beautiful, and having the POV of one of her sisters was an interesting idea

[scratchmist]

Thank you very much for leaving a comment! (Despite the trouble LJ gave you.) ^^ I'm so glad I made you happy.

[letterbugg]

This is beautiful, it really is.

[scratchmist]

Thank you! ^^x I'm very flattered.

[dejablue7]

This was lovely and heartbreaking.

Some bits I liked particularly:

-The sorceress smiles, eerily. She talks a jar from her shelf of potions, and places an oddly-shaped, pink object into her mouth. When she speaks, it is with the exact voice of your little sister.

“Perhaps you should not have asked.”

-If she had her tongue, she might have been laughing for her love’s sake, but in your heart, all you hear is screaming.

-you back dive into the ocean, and try not to wonder why.

These lines just felt very powerful as I read this, with a strong emotional punch.

Wonderful work.

[scratchmist]

Thank you very much for your comment! What makes me happiest is when I'm able to move a reader. ^^ And I'm glad you liked the last line. (I didn't think it was meaningful enough, so, yeah. Teehee.)

[wordsofastory]

Oh, this story is genius. I've never particularly liked Anderson's 'The Little Mermaid', because I feel so bad for the mermaid, but this story is such a lovely, heartbreaking take on it. I love the idea of telling it from the pov of one of the sisters; that's amazing. This story is really great. Thank you.