Title: In Loco Parentis
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hyperemmalawlz Fandom: Glee
Characters/Pairing: Burt, Finn, Will. Also an appearance by Carole; references to Kurt and Rachel.
Word Count: 4345
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Burt's never liked Will Schuester. He admits it. However, he likes the man a whole lot less once he notices Schuester's habit of touching his stepson.
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Totally my perception, of course, and if you and your beta don't see it, then it's just me.
(Hope you don't mind my sharing all this; you're such a good [I want to say "professional"] writer that I'm assuming that this kind of feedback is useful to you. If not, please ignore!)
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Your Burt is spot on, I love it.
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Burt prays like hell Finn is right about all this, and he is wrong. Finn still doesn't answer; he just keeps staring out the window.I think it leaves things more open, and maybe a touch more ambiguous and slightly creepy, because it leaves things with Finn, leaving us wondering what he thinking about as he looks out that window, if he's now starting to feel paranoid because of what Burt said, or if his own feelings of uncomfortability are possibily being confirmed by this conversation he just had and he's not ready to admit it because he really did think Schue was a good guy and helped him through the whole Quinn thing... Switching the two sentences in that way might provide more of the 'question mark' that you're looking for ( ... )
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Thanks. I'll admit, I wondered a bit about my Burt voice - I seemed to keep fading in and out of it, so I'm glad it worked for you.
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