Comments | hyperemmalawlz: Fic: In Loco Parentis (Burt, Finn, Will) PG-13

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Fic: In Loco Parentis (Burt, Finn, Will) PG-13

Dec 07, 2010 21:36

Title: In Loco Parentis
Author: hyperemmalawlz
Fandom: Glee
Characters/Pairing: Burt, Finn, Will. Also an appearance by Carole; references to Kurt and Rachel.
Word Count: 4345
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Burt's never liked Will Schuester. He admits it. However, he likes the man a whole lot less once he notices Schuester's habit of touching his stepson.
Spoilers: Up ( Read more... )

will, burt, finn, glee, fanfic

Comments 18

trickster88 December 7 2010, 20:48:23 UTC

I feel like there's an ending missing, and actually, I never noticed how much Schuester touched Finn until now! Holy crap! I'm going to notice that every time it happens now.

Also, even if you weren't planning on sequeling it, I would like to suggest rewriting this in Finn's POV. I think it would be really interesting, and you are such a great writer that it would be even more fantastic. :D

Fabulous job! :D

hyperemmalawlz December 7 2010, 23:43:15 UTC

Hmm. I've got a feeling a lot of people are going to ask for an ending. Will... is a fairly touchy man. I usually just say it's the way he is and don't pay attention to it, but it's fun to play around with (especially with Finn, who Will is closest to and who is my favorite to hurt for fic).

Hmm. That could actually work. *thoughtful*

Thank you!

ellydash December 8 2010, 06:40:16 UTC

This is great. Creepy with some really effective tension. And I have to say, I actually like that you wrote an ambiguous ending - this isn't a situation with an easy resolution.

Also, your Burt <3

hyperemmalawlz December 8 2010, 06:54:30 UTC

Thanks. :)

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hyperemmalawlz December 8 2010, 21:48:54 UTC

Thank you. I decided from the start when writing this to try and keep Will at or very close to the level he's at in the show... he does touch Finn a damn lot. And yeah, there's nothing concrete.

hermiones_twin December 8 2010, 15:22:54 UTC

But he's not, like, perving on me in the shower or some shit.

Uh, actually, about that, Finn.... heh.

This was really.... interesting. I've had some of those potentially-in-your-space-too-much teachers, usually ones that (like Finn) I was very fond of. Being in Burt's headspace and seeing his reactions to that was... different, but cool.

hyperemmalawlz December 8 2010, 21:54:15 UTC

Heh. I did purposely put that line in for the creepy dramatic irony of it.

Hmm. Teachers can be kind of ambiguous about what they do, so... yeah. IDK.