hey I saw this posted under lv_hg_betrayal and decided to check it out. That was hot!
I absolutely adored this sentence:
It was that way every time, her leading him down every single time, the cause of his madness, his weakness, and his feeling. She loved being the reason.
It captured the essence of their relationship so well! Absolutely beautiful!
Hey, good job I like the story, as well as I did Seven Days. I noticed a little something, however. You say that hermione takes time it taking off her clothes... yet, when she gets to Tom, he starts unbuttoning her blouse. That just make me go ehhh? how many layers is this girl wearing? heh. but other than that, good job.
It was that way every time, her leading him down every single time, the cause of his madness, his weakness, and his feeling.
She loved being the reason.
Ooooh, I LOVED those lines. Fabulous.
I have a soft spot for scavenger hunt like notes, as one of my best childhood birthdays ever involved me having to solve a series of clues to find my presents. Ah, good times. Too bad I didn't get a Riddle at the end. Although I certainly wouldn't have known what to do with him at the time.... ;o)
Hey, don't forget to claim a card over at hp_tarot. Pink and I already did. About 20 cards have been claimed for fic, almost as many for art. Could you help pimp the comm?
What??? Oh dear, can't have that. They read, in order:
1. Knew you'd find this eventually.
Now don't make me wait; Go on and move the fireplace grate.
There's one.
2. Very good.
With marmelade or not, we both like the next spot.
Go.
3. I hope that one was obvious enough.
With foam, soap, and bubble, I take off my stubble.
No stairs need to be tread; stay down here instead.
That's three.
4. I trust it didn't take you too long to find this one, as I'm waiting.
That last bits not true anymore, like I said before.
Up the stairs with you.
5. You probably know where you're going by now, but play along.
Before you go through your favorite door, and get to see me and hear me roar; Take off these clothes if you please, and put away that wand, you goddamn tease.
Her eyes shot open, only to see his closed in ecstasy, his head thrust back, his mouth half-open as well. Hissing lightly, he looked down at her, an almost pleading look on his face. “I had to,” he breathed. “I… couldn’t…”
I have to admit, those lines were the hottest ones in the whole fic...they tottaly did me in....lol
Thank you for giving me the notes...made more sence...lol
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I absolutely adored this sentence:
It was that way every time, her leading him down every single time, the cause of his madness, his weakness, and his feeling.
She loved being the reason.
It captured the essence of their relationship so well! Absolutely beautiful!
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*loves* XD
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Thanks for noticing! I hadn't thought of that at all. Dammit.
*goes to fix*
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She loved being the reason.
Ooooh, I LOVED those lines. Fabulous.
I have a soft spot for scavenger hunt like notes, as one of my best childhood birthdays ever involved me having to solve a series of clues to find my presents. Ah, good times. Too bad I didn't get a Riddle at the end. Although I certainly wouldn't have known what to do with him at the time.... ;o)
Delicious story, my dear.
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1. Knew you'd find this eventually.
Now don't make me wait;
Go on and move the fireplace grate.
There's one.
2. Very good.
With marmelade or not,
we both like the next spot.
Go.
3. I hope that one was obvious enough.
With foam, soap, and bubble,
I take off my stubble.
No stairs need to be tread;
stay down here instead.
That's three.
4. I trust it didn't take you too long to find this one, as I'm waiting.
That last bits not true anymore,
like I said before.
Up the stairs with you.
5. You probably know where you're going by now, but play along.
Before you go through your favorite door,
and get to see me and hear me roar;
Take off these clothes if you please,
and put away that wand, you goddamn tease.
Now come inside already, I'm getting impatient.
:D
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I have to admit, those lines were the hottest ones in the whole fic...they tottaly did me in....lol
Thank you for giving me the notes...made more sence...lol
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Have you read it's predecessor, the story that would make this one make even more sense, haha?
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