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hurricanecosmo

VIEWFINDER STORY: UNTIL YOU (A POEM)

Nov 14, 2010 21:09

Until You

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until you, krambi fanart, poem, asami/akihito

Comments 28

kawahimes_world November 15 2010, 03:56:21 UTC

how sweet! nicely done. i like how you tie it together every 4th line. those are the ones that really stood out to me. nice emotion. i look forward to reading the fic.

ps. i'd help with how to fix the link... but i barely know how to do this myself. sorry.

hurricanecosmo November 15 2010, 04:16:52 UTC

Thank you! I am glad you liked it! I figured out the link! yea me!

Sweet Poem krambi003 November 15 2010, 05:14:44 UTC

That's pretty sweet. An original way to make Asami confess.
The sentences I like the most are those about Akihito (though the others are pretty good). To me, these ones are just like secret thoughts Asami could have when watching his boy sleeping (for example). Of course I like the part of the sentence "I never knew love before you" but my favourite of all cause I think it is more relevant of Asami's true nature and what Aki means to him is "I never knew fear before you" ^_~

Thanks for sharing ^___^

PS : love the layout of your LJ *o*

Re: Sweet Poem hurricanecosmo November 15 2010, 05:24:03 UTC

Thank you! I am so glad you like it. The 'fear' one is my favorite too. The actual fan fic will follow this. I hope you like it too!

Re: Sweet Poem hurricanecosmo November 30 2010, 03:36:52 UTC

I did it!!! It's a little fuzzy since I increased the size of it but I think it looks good. Thank you Krambi, you truly are awesome! btw, something you said in your final review got me thinking and I think you may have inspired the end of the sequel. I am still putting it together but I hope to have something to post soon. Hopefully you will like it!

slizzards November 15 2010, 05:35:31 UTC

Sweet!!!
i like the line
"i've loved and i've lost, leaned to live with the cost,of a yakuza's lonely live, it is true"
and i think, u missed a letter, 'r' in the word 'leaned'.
anyway, it's really nice!!
good job!

hurricanecosmo November 15 2010, 06:18:49 UTC

thank you! I will fix it!

radcat38 November 15 2010, 06:03:14 UTC

I think you captured Asami perfectly. I loved this look at how Asami feels about Asami and his own world and people. Very nice.

hurricanecosmo November 15 2010, 06:19:37 UTC

Thank you! I am so glad you liked it. The actual story will follow.

radcat38 November 15 2010, 06:41:33 UTC

This should have said "I loved this look at how Asami feels about Akihito and his own world and people." I cannot believe I did not catch the error...thanks for ignoring it and knowing what I reallly meant. hahaha. c

niseimono November 15 2010, 07:32:28 UTC

I really like this <33
Thank you for sharing <-- can't think of anything else to say XD