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fic: Every Word Is Nonsense (But I Understand) (Lily/James)

Jan 05, 2006 09:49

title: Every Word Is Nonsense (But I Understand)
author: victoria p.
summary: She'd thought if she said yes once, she'd never have to again, and now she can't stop saying it.
pairing: Lily/James
rating: pg
disclaimer: Rowling's, not mine.
notes: title and cut-tag quote from "Anna Begins" by Counting Crows
word count: 910 words

( she's talking in her sleep, it's keeping me awake )

james potter, titles: a-l, musesfool, james/lily, lily evans potter

Comments 18

acony_bell January 5 2006, 07:55:47 UTC

This was delightful. Oh, I loved it. Especially this:

When he touches her, his hands eager and gentle on her skin, as he slides inside her body, he murmurs it over and over again, "Love you, Lily, love you so much," like it's a spell that can protect them both, or a prayer and she's the only answer he'll ever need.

This is my James, the one I picture in my head, and you've written him and Lily both just right.

musesfool January 5 2006, 08:05:54 UTC

Thank you so much! I'm so happy I captured teh characters for you.

ciciaye January 5 2006, 08:27:26 UTC

Very tender and very beautiful :-)
Excellent.
CCA

musesfool January 5 2006, 09:28:41 UTC

Thank you!

exit_chrysalis January 5 2006, 09:00:35 UTC

That was absolutely adorable. I loved it to pieces. :D

musesfool January 5 2006, 09:29:09 UTC

Thank you so much!

kethlenda January 5 2006, 09:50:59 UTC

This is so sweet, and bittersweet, since you know how it will end. My favorite line is this one, such a wonderful description of love's beginnings...

She slept with him for the first time that night, shocked and a little nervous that three years of irritation could have turned into something else, something so small and tender inside her that she couldn't even put a name to it for months, like an unfurling of wings, something opening up inside that makes her breathless and shaky when she thinks about it

musesfool January 5 2006, 10:06:28 UTC

Thank you so much! I'm so happy it works for you.

Oh, Lord. I'm not ready for this sort of thing. yaycoffee January 5 2006, 20:00:03 UTC

The fic was just... AMAZING and beautiful!

This: ...she has to blink quickly to keep away the tears, and that feeling is in her chest again, as if she has run very hard for a very long time, and only now realized she has wings and she can fly. Gorgeous!

I just loved it! Excellent!

Re: Oh, Lord. I'm not ready for this sort of thing. musesfool January 9 2006, 08:53:09 UTC

Thank you so much! I'm so happy you enjoyed it.