"Within A Morning Star" (Asteria Greengrass, Demelza Robins, various)

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Harrowing.

[wemyss]

Admirably done.

[ext_1054020]

Thank you very much!

[kellychambliss]

You've created such a thorough, full world here; I was immediately immersed in it. I enjoyed your OCs very much and also liked the chance to see the DH year (and the Battle) from non-Trio povs.

[ext_1054020]

Thank you so much! I really enjoy thinking about this year at Hogwarts too, this was fun to write.

[pitry]

Absolutely brilliant. I loved this to pieces. Your OCs were all greatly sketched (oooh, I think I'm in love with Siofra, just a little bit ;) ), and their interactions were so real. This is what I loved most about this - how they're still teenagers, how they still worry about the house points and essays and everything, and all the while there's the war lurking in the corners. I loved the complicated and real way you addressed their differences - not everyone is going to be a hero, not everyone is going to think about what they were taught and why they were being taught it - esp. those who aren't in the trio's year or don't have families who are involved in the Order and so never see what it's about. The Slytherins too - the uninvolved Slytherins are so rarely explored, and this was such a realistic depiction of it, their attitudes and the way they see the world (and HUH! Chrysenthemum's secret

[ext_1054020]

:D Thank you so much! I didn't want to get too cliche with the Slytherins but I thought this would be a nice twist. In my mind Chrysanthemum was just spooking herself because they were all sort of in the wrong place at the wrong time. Glad Orrel and Derek came through for you, they had some shorter sections but I'm glad they didn't get shortchanged. Thanks again, I'm so glad you enjoyed!

[nnozomi]

Wow. You used an ensemble cast and kept each member distinct and interesting, and showed the way daily life happens and is usually more important than the big important things. A much more believable idea of the year than the cartoonish horrors implied in canon...not sure that makes sense, but what the hell, I like your version. More like this please...

[ext_1054020]

Thank you so much! Don't mean to brag, but I have written a little more about Demelza and the Quidditch team (and this year in general) if you're ever interested.

[ext_1054020]

Thanks, and yes, when it came time to make up new names I thought "hmm, there's an easy way to go about this..." ;-)

Edit: and thanks so much for running the fest!