Concrit Post 9

Aug 24, 2009 14:15

How's My Driving?

∞ comment with all the journals you RP with (and the communities they're from).
∞ reply to other people's comments (anon or logged in) with constructive criticism
∞ learn from the suggestions and profit!

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kanisi_kokoro August 24 2009, 23:02:00 UTC
sdfgfdn I AM ALWAYS LATE \o/

@ discedo

Namine | Kingdom Hearts | dustedsunlight
Daisuke Niwa | D.N.Angel | loyalwings
Estonia [Eduard Von Bock] | Axis Powers: Hetalia | ignoredbaltic

@ theoregontrail

Sora | Kingdom Hearts | brightedblue

@ vardskepp

Roxas | Kingdom Hearts | mutedblue
Shiki Misaki | The World Ends With You | fourthblossom

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Shiki Misaki | The World Ends With You | designingly --> Formerly at discedo

derpderp CRIT AWAY EVEN IF I'M LATE

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saltprince August 24 2009, 23:14:37 UTC
ACTIVITY. WE MISS YOU AT VARDS YOU LUG :C

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kanisi_kokoro August 24 2009, 23:15:57 UTC
I KNOW I'M SORRY I actually just got off steriods and all this bullcrap medication for the mono but I'M ALIVE NOW so if my mom isn't a bitch tonight I WILL BE ON VARDS I've been terrible D|

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saltprince August 24 2009, 23:19:48 UTC
Awesome. I hope for an amazing comeback and it will be awesome and stuff.

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kanisi_kokoro August 24 2009, 23:21:11 UTC
I'm kind of thinking I'll have Roxas send a golfball through a window or something. Or find some fireworks in a shop and not know how to set them off and end up setting something on fire. IDK, SOMETHING ENTERTAINING. Shiki's definately going to be spazzing over the fact that there are sewing supplies.

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kanisi_kokoro August 25 2009, 00:01:13 UTC
Your Namine seems to be a bit too soft-spoken and timid... and I'm not sure if that's because she's from COM or KHII - I searched her profile and skimmed her journal but didn't find an OOC post (if I missed it, I apologize), because I think there's a difference between CoM Namine and Namine in KHII. She was very timid throughout the beginning of COM, but near the end she manned up to stand up for herself, etc. IMO yours could be a little more firm and less tentative, but I suppose that just depends on how you're playing her/in game development. Just my two cents, this was a drive by crit.

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kanisi_kokoro August 25 2009, 01:33:43 UTC
She is actually from post-KH2, I've been trying to make her a little more up in there (she had an argument with Prussia at one point; which was very, very entertaining) but I'll definately see what I can do about all that. ♥

Thank you for your crit, anon- no one seems to ever talk to me about her, so it's nice. Thanks a bunch!

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kanisi_kokoro August 25 2009, 02:16:53 UTC
Oh, okay, then you'll definitely want to make her a little more firm on her beliefs and actions. By the end she's not too much of a pushover and proven to be quite tough. It's okay for her to be worried often, but remember: she's still strong and won't bend so easily. Good to hear that she got into an argument/debate with Prussia, that shows she has some spunk to her!

Haha, no problem :) this anon knows what it's like to not receive any crit when it's really wanted.

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brightedblue August 25 2009, 03:58:59 UTC
Totally. She needs to go yell at Russia and America for getting in a fight actually; she made them promise they'd be nicer (as much as we know this will never happen ever) but they ended up shooting each other, so. I'll definately take that to heart, Anon.

Awww, well I'm glad Anon is giving me crit. ♥ Thanks a bunch!

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superfluously August 25 2009, 14:39:27 UTC
we need to interact more.

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kanisi_kokoro August 25 2009, 23:33:59 UTC
Totally D: WE NEED MORE REASONS TO BLOW SHIT UP idk.

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usernameism August 25 2009, 22:48:20 UTC
my crit is that all your characters are moe 8|

oh wait. that's what I love about them. ♥ /so helpful yeaaa

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kanisi_kokoro August 25 2009, 23:37:19 UTC
dffhdf YOU ENABLED ME INTO TWO OF THESE MOE CHARACTERS, GOSH

you just love me too much c:

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