Fic: Stamp Of Origin: Ocean Meets Bay (1/1)

[hitlikehammers]

Title: Stamp Of Origin: Ocean Meets Bay
Rating: PG-13
Pairing: Richard/Jacob
Word Count: 2,442
Summary: To be honest, he’s not entirely sure where the story begins, anymore. For the 15pairings Prompt #9 - Water. Spoilers through 5.16 - The Incident, Parts 1 & 2.
Prompt Table: Here
Disclaimer: I own nothing but the plot. Title belongs to dredg.
Author’s Notes

Comments

[hitlikehammers]

Goodness... thank you. I cannot tell you how pleased I am that you thought this worked, and that you felt it was "mythological" in a way, because that's exactly what I was going for. And I'm also glad you didn't mind sharing! I hope you enjoy the other story if/when you get around to it (it's secretly one of my favorite things that I've ever written ;) )

[starfoozle]

Oh, this is incredible.

They wake to the breaking dawn and they sleep beneath the stars and Richard, who would forever be a child to the man who held him close, has never lost his sense of wonder, has yet to cease marveling at the play of the moon on the ripples of the water, the way the light fractures and glows so far, so near, around them and between them and in every move they make. I love this, even though I could sense what might be coming next. I like the idea that time seems to bend around Jacob here, and I really like the idea that Richard didn't actually choose this for himself. What a gift that was.

This is the shape of forever, he fears, an eternity from which there is no escape. What a line. I love the contrast between the first and last sections. Richard's loss of wonder (and, I think, to some degree, innocence) post-change is heartbreaking

[hitlikehammers]

Thank you so, so much! I'm absolutely thrilled that you so enjoyed this, and that the contrasts stood out to you like that. And I am definitely of the opinion that these two characters lend themselves to Biblical metaphors and references almost naturally - perhaps because Jacob was always portrayed as something... larger than life, almost superhuman? Anyway - I look forward to seeing what your dialogue ends up producing! And thank you again!

[bold_seer]

Wow. This is lyrical and ethereal and it fits Richard and Jacob perfectly.

Jacob is beyond time, outside of it, the world slows in his presence, narrows to his singular existence, and Richard; Richard is only lucky enough to know that beauty, blessed to know such unparalleled love.

That's stunning!

[hitlikehammers]

Thank you, so much - I'm so glad that you felt this fit them, and that you enjoyed that line in particular (I didn't know if it was too much, but I was rather attached to it, so I kept it :) )

[elliotsmelliot]

Oh, so interesting! I'm so glad you chose to write this, and let there be more to come.

He doesn’t know how he gets to his feet, he only knows that he does, in the end, and he follows, because there is nothing else - nothing else.

There was such lovely imagery here, but the one that stood out for was that of Richard being a follower, not a blind one, he goes with eyes wide open, and stumbles after all the answers, pleasures, and gifts available just for him. It makes me think later he will follow more reluctantly after all those gifts lose their shine.

“Do you trust me with your soul?”

This line gave me chills, as did your description of the deliverance of Jacob's promise! Also, the idea of Richard also being a child to Jacob's man, is an interesting metaphor for their power imbalance.

Great work!

[hitlikehammers]

Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed this - thanks again for the idea! I tried to make it gen, originally, but it seemed to flow with a soft pairing between these two much better than without, so I'm glad that wasn't too much of a deviation for you. The whole, convoluted "series" has evolved into a sort of... analysis of Richard through his relationships with others (so far, I've got little tidbits both with people I can imagine and ones I can't quite wrap my own head around but think might be interesting to try - I think Alex and Horace are my most difficult ones thus far ;) ) - hopefully you'll enjoy those as well!

[siluria]

Really beautiful and bittersweet with the angst of the last section really bringing everything home. Very nice!!!!

[hitlikehammers]

Thank you! I'm really glad you liked the tie-back at the end; I had one heck of a time trying to get that to come together with the rest of the story, so I'm happy you enjoyed it :)