Title: The Loveliest Village on the Plains
Rating: R
Pairing: Jack/Sawyer
Word Count: 1,606
Summary: There is a side of him that only the jungle sees. For the
psych_30 Prompt #5 - Multiple Personality.
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HereDisclaimer: I own nothing but the plot. The poem referenced is “The Deserted Village” by Oliver Goldsmith, from which Auburn, Alabama
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That aside, this was very poetically written... so I can see how you would want an elegant word like coitus to go in with the rest. :) I don't think I quite understood it all, but that didn't take away from the peaceful images and the trust I got from this delightful piece.
Thanks for writing and sharing!
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And now, a response to the word specs: you raise an excellent point on the account of my word choice (so please know that I'm not trying to rebuff your criticism, for I think it's duly warranted). I'm something of a language nerd, myself, so I can actually say that I did some searching for a more fitting term there, having a similar peeve with that semi-inaccurate word, and I found myself somewhat intrigued by the technicalities of the term (again, I'm nerdy like that... fascinated by the origins of "coitus" *rolls eyes*). So, here's what I eventually settled on: the word coitus, if I remember correctly (and forgive me if I don’t, because it’s been a while and sometimes I get my languages mixed up) was derived from the Latin for ‘go together,’ and was then later applied to the biological sexual act. Because I do know that we call ( ... )
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I wasn't aware that the modern definition included anal sex-- although my definition was from a text book and those don't tend to keep up so well with linguistic drift. :D
As for a better word? I don't really have one, I'm sorry to say. When people try to use the phrase "post-coital bliss" I would suggest "post-orgasmic bliss" instead, but just "post-orgasm" sounds... I dunno. Not as poetic. And it's certainly not as specific as coitus. "Post-coupling" might be nice because it's a more general term.
I hope that my blundering thoughts have given you a little more clarity on your word choice, because it's certainly not invalid as it is. Again, thanks for being so awesome about my nit-pickiness.
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I agree that this was quite poetic. :)
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