Fic: The Loveliest Village on the Plains (1/1)

[hitlikehammers]

Title: The Loveliest Village on the Plains
Rating: R
Pairing: Jack/Sawyer
Word Count: 1,606
Summary: There is a side of him that only the jungle sees. For the psych_30 Prompt #5 - Multiple Personality.
Prompt Table: Here
Disclaimer: I own nothing but the plot. The poem referenced is “The Deserted Village” by Oliver Goldsmith, from which Auburn, Alabama

Comments

[hitlikehammers]

First off, thank you ever so much, because I was having a rather love-hate with this little fic, not sure what I thought of it; but if you think it's poetic, then I must have done something right :)

And now, a response to the word specs: you raise an excellent point on the account of my word choice (so please know that I'm not trying to rebuff your criticism, for I think it's duly warranted). I'm something of a language nerd, myself, so I can actually say that I did some searching for a more fitting term there, having a similar peeve with that semi-inaccurate word, and I found myself somewhat intrigued by the technicalities of the term (again, I'm nerdy like that... fascinated by the origins of "coitus" *rolls eyes*). So, here's what I eventually settled on: the word coitus, if I remember correctly (and forgive me if I don’t, because it’s been a while and sometimes I get my languages mixed up) was derived from the Latin for ‘go together,’ and was then later applied to the biological sexual act. Because I do know that we call homosexual and/or hermaphroditic intercourse “coitus” in biology for other animals, and as I believe it was wikipedia (which, of course, is both useful and academic porn at the very same time) that informed me that penetration of non-sexual organs, i.e. anal, can theoretically be covered in a broader, modern interpretation of the term, I let it slide, though not without your same reservations.

Anyway, thought you might appreciate the ramble, as you cared enough to point out the mistake :) If not, feel free to ignore me entirely.

In any case - have you any suggestions for a less-ambiguous term that doesn’t necessarily have the crassness of so many used in slash? I’d be more than appreciative to hear your suggestions!

[obreesprit]

Thanks for taking my pet peeve so well. :) I think I'm most sensitive about the word because I hate it when gay men are compared to women. Being a trans-man, this happens to me quite a lot.

I wasn't aware that the modern definition included anal sex-- although my definition was from a text book and those don't tend to keep up so well with linguistic drift. :D

As for a better word? I don't really have one, I'm sorry to say. When people try to use the phrase "post-coital bliss" I would suggest "post-orgasmic bliss" instead, but just "post-orgasm" sounds... I dunno. Not as poetic. And it's certainly not as specific as coitus. "Post-coupling" might be nice because it's a more general term.

I hope that my blundering thoughts have given you a little more clarity on your word choice, because it's certainly not invalid as it is. Again, thanks for being so awesome about my nit-pickiness.