Comments | hiro_chan: 3 Little Drabbles for footie100 :)

hiro_chan

3 Little Drabbles for footie100 :)

Oct 20, 2007 18:19

Hi Ho! Only 3 drabbles for now but hey, better than nothing, yea :D:D??

Author : hiro_chan
Rating : G - R
Prompt : Frustration
Disclaimer : Liieeessss, all are liieeesss ;)

( Drabble 1. Paul Scholes )

paul scholes, wayne rooney, cristiano ronaldo, manchester united, footie_100

Comments 11

carameltrap October 20 2007, 11:56:06 UTC

01. Aw, Keano. :) You wrote this well. I can sense and feel Paul's nerves and frustration at not being able to run about on the pitch with the lads and instead had to sit out.

02. Poor Cris. *pets*

03. It's the feeling when you're breezing through only to crash back down and you want to blame someone for it. I like this one, that Wayne wanted to blame Paul for the defeat just because, even though he knew it wasn't Paul's fault. I don't think it's incomplete.

hiro_chan October 21 2007, 08:53:42 UTC

Thank you :).

Don't worry about Cris, he's back in Manchester and humping like bunnies with Wayne *g*.

And thanks for the comment on #3, makes me feel a whole lot better about it now :).

aeroporto October 20 2007, 12:10:23 UTC

LOVED THEM. As usual. Great stuff!

#1 is my favorite, although I think there would've been many more emotions involved. Joy when Solskjaer scored, combined with the sadness of not having been part of it...Okay, I have successfully made myself nostalgic.

hiro_chan October 21 2007, 08:56:34 UTC

THANK YOU ^___________^~!

I know what you mean re: #1. I think the mistake I did with it was that in the first line I made it as though it was a recolection when the match was already over (hence the part "For the others, it was magic") because I'm sure it wasn't really magical for everyone when they were still chasing the match :p.

But, yeah, at least I managed to get the mood accross ;). And yes, the lightest mention of 99 really made me nostalgic too :)

shandoraz October 20 2007, 12:59:05 UTC

You get that feeling because you know which one is the biggest OTP around? ;D

Well yes. 2 my favourite. When it's Cristiano who loves football and the team won and their again closer to the bigger goal and everything's great but all he wants is to be back in Manchester because of Wayne? That to me says tells a great deal of the depth of feelings he has for Wayne.

1: Mwahah Keano :D And Paul's being cute.

3: I don't want to think about that loss. Makes me growl. I understand how Wayne feels.

hiro_chan October 21 2007, 09:02:30 UTC

You get that feeling because you know which one is the biggest OTP around? ;D

*grins* kind of :). I'm glad you like that one, I don't think I've ever written a drabble about jerking off in the shower before hahaha, so I'm glad it kind of worked ;).

shandoraz October 21 2007, 09:27:35 UTC

Everyone needs to write a fic with jerking off in the shower in it! c(=

rizzyr October 20 2007, 18:34:06 UTC

Awwwwww!!! Keano and Paul so cute in the first one.

Beside him, Keano sighed, and, like a parent admonishing his children, glared pointedly at Paul's legs which made unconscious kicking motion

I just love that line. I can totally see it in my head so clearly. Love it. :)

And the second one. *happy sigh* Lovely.....love that all Cris wants is to get back to Wayne. And the third was great too. Wayne wanting to blame someone else for his frustration is so real and clear.

Great job!

hiro_chan October 21 2007, 09:04:41 UTC

I could totally see that scene too - keano glaring admonishingly at Paul *g* - because it kind of fit his character as well XD.

Thank you, I'm so happy you enjoyed the drabbles :):):).

kobean October 21 2007, 05:28:07 UTC

Paul muttered a “sorry” and tried to sit still. But then Nicky lost a possession and it didn't take long before his feet started kicking again.

SO SO CUTE. i can just picture it all. and the frustration and the helplessness. this has to be my favourite. ♥ it was just so real and it is really easy to associate with paul because we've all been there - felt helpless and there wasn't anything we could do. sdlgkndskgn. i really love it a lot! :D

SDKLGNSKLGDN WAYNE AND CRIS! awwww!

because the warm water pelting on his skin wasn't as warm as Wayne's bodyi pretty much melted in my seat at this part. and just. sigh. i really like your style of comparing one thing to another, it's really lovely. it has to be one of my favourite points of your writing, but then again, i love everything about it ( ... )

hiro_chan October 21 2007, 09:11:42 UTC

snksgfjlsjhd!

Thank you thank you thank you :). I'm so glad #1 came out really nicely, it's my personal favourite, and you're right, it's easy to relate with Paul's feeling that night.

Then again you can also easily relate to Ronaldo in #2 and Wayne in #3 because I think everyone has gone through similar situation too (not necessarily jerking off like Cris did, but you know what I mean *g*)

You made me feel better about #3. I keep feeling there should be more to it, but the replies here made me feel better :).

Now. I shall wait patiently (or not :p) for the Ole/Paul fic :):):).