Gorgeous [Part 3/?]
anonymous
February 10 2010, 08:23:29 UTC
He wasn't quite sure how Arthur had managed to reverse their positions. One moment, he was about to snap the cuffs over the older man's wrists and have his wicked way with him, and then in a blur of movement, it was he who was cuffed and spread out for the Englishman's hungry eyes to devour
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Author!Anon apologizes
anonymous
March 6 2010, 22:38:10 UTC
Many apologies for the lateness in updates. My internet has been down for a while, so I wasn't able to access the online notepad I've been writing this fill on. Not to mention that I've been feeling like utter shite this last week while simultaneously attempting to finish up a first draft on a novel.
So in short: I'll be attempting to finish this all up within the following week. =)
Re: Gorgeous [Part 4/5]
anonymous
March 11 2010, 09:57:11 UTC
Alfred was silent but for the hiss of air forced from his nostrils as Arthur fucked his mouth faster, slightly harder, but always mindful not to make the younger nation gag or suffocate. Warmth ran down the Briton's spine, trickling south to his groin and pooling there as a particular sensation of anticipation began to build from his feet upwards. Feeling his core muscles beginning to tighten, thighs trembling as he forcefully kept on abusing the other nation's mouth, Arthur let himself be taken by pleasure
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Gorgeous [Part 5/5]
anonymous
March 11 2010, 10:06:48 UTC
Woops, bit of inconsistency. Alfred was supposed to have his hands behind his back rather than on his lap before Arthur finished off the first time. ------
A tongue sliding over the swollen globe of his left buttock silenced him, warm saliva quickly cooling over the hot flesh in the cool air of the cellar. Arthur's nose pressed against the sensitive flesh, drawing first a whine from Alfred, then a throaty moan as his tongue delved into the cleft of his buttocks, trailing down until the tip of the moist organ was circling the taught ring of muscles that the American so desperately then wished to be penetrated.
"Please! I- I need to-" The American rolled his hips against the wood of the cross, the head of his erection just barely brushing against one of the silver studs that decorated the black wood. He was so, so close, but the ring prevented his release, almost to the point of pain which, of course, only aroused him further. When Arthur broke through the tight ring of muscle and began tonguing him, Alfred nearly sobbed and was -
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Re: Gorgeous [Part 5/5]
anonymous
March 11 2010, 15:42:18 UTC
The entire fic was pure and utter hotness and I loved how you wrote them! One small thing that really took me out of the mind melting hotness was that Arthur took him "dry". That, I mean, there's no way you can be taken dry and without prep without seriously tearing up the person receiving, not just nice pain but bad pain. Other than that the fic was amazing and I really enjoyed it!
Re: Gorgeous [Part 5/5]
anonymous
March 11 2010, 19:13:56 UTC
author!anon here;
I actually have to agree with you. Normally I prefer not to write 'dry' scenes as I'm aware the pain they actually do cause (unpleasant stuff, I can understand, yeowch), but it was about 3 am when I was finishing writing this...and my sleepy mind is apparently apt at deciding 'hey, lets add this in!'
Sorry for the discomfort, I'll do my best to keep an eye on my sleepy brain if I'm ever writing that late again. *gives a box o' chocolates* Thanks for reading and giving me that concrit! It was much appreciated. =)
Re: Gorgeous [Part 5/5]
anonymous
March 13 2010, 17:51:45 UTC
ARUGH. GUH. SO. FRIGGING. HOT. *rereads to remember every single damn detail in the fic*
Seriously, I loved this fill. And the characterisations are spot on. <3 I don't think I've read a hotter and more well-written BDSM fill, and it gave me so many kinks that I didn't know I had/liked. *cough*daddykink*cough*
Though, if you don't mind, I'd like to make the suggestion that perhaps you could makes some changes to the dry penetration part if you de-anon someday (please, please do. I want to read your other fics so much). It was the only thing that threw me off and momentarily pulled me out of this smooth-reading and well-written fic. I know that you know how much tissue damage there will be, so I'm just making the suggestion that maybe the change will make the fic even more believable for fans who like to imagine them at it. ^_~
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That will take you back to the original request, which has the first few parts on it as well. =)
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This is really hot, anon. :)
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ReCaptcha: "upbraids citizen" ... I don't think my country likes that idea, actually.
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But than again you like it huh Daddy? *smirk*
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So in short: I'll be attempting to finish this all up within the following week. =)
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Sorry all the shit's hitting the fan at once; life likes to do that, doesn't it? ^_^; Good luck with your novel! :Db
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A tongue sliding over the swollen globe of his left buttock silenced him, warm saliva quickly cooling over the hot flesh in the cool air of the cellar. Arthur's nose pressed against the sensitive flesh, drawing first a whine from Alfred, then a throaty moan as his tongue delved into the cleft of his buttocks, trailing down until the tip of the moist organ was circling the taught ring of muscles that the American so desperately then wished to be penetrated.
"Please! I- I need to-" The American rolled his hips against the wood of the cross, the head of his erection just barely brushing against one of the silver studs that decorated the black wood. He was so, so close, but the ring prevented his release, almost to the point of pain which, of course, only aroused him further. When Arthur broke through the tight ring of muscle and began tonguing him, Alfred nearly sobbed and was - ( ... )
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This. Was. Hot.
How hot?
I squirmed in my seat. And I don't even like bondage. Dominant England and the whole tables being turned on America thing is just.... nggh.
I enjoyed reading this. Thank you.
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I actually have to agree with you. Normally I prefer not to write 'dry' scenes as I'm aware the pain they actually do cause (unpleasant stuff, I can understand, yeowch), but it was about 3 am when I was finishing writing this...and my sleepy mind is apparently apt at deciding 'hey, lets add this in!'
Sorry for the discomfort, I'll do my best to keep an eye on my sleepy brain if I'm ever writing that late again. *gives a box o' chocolates* Thanks for reading and giving me that concrit! It was much appreciated. =)
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Seriously, I loved this fill. And the characterisations are spot on. <3 I don't think I've read a hotter and more well-written BDSM fill, and it gave me so many kinks that I didn't know I had/liked. *cough*daddykink*cough*
Though, if you don't mind, I'd like to make the suggestion that perhaps you could makes some changes to the dry penetration part if you de-anon someday (please, please do. I want to read your other fics so much). It was the only thing that threw me off and momentarily pulled me out of this smooth-reading and well-written fic. I know that you know how much tissue damage there will be, so I'm just making the suggestion that maybe the change will make the fic even more believable for fans who like to imagine them at it. ^_~
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