CHAPTER FIC: Impending. Chapter 1: Initial Contact

[herbailiwick]

Title: Impending
Rating: This part PG-13 for language. NC-17 eventually.
Pairing: Eventual Nathan/Murderface.
Notes: High school AU. Cause there isn't enough of it.

Comments

[sike_saner]

"You might wanna leave before your popularity is irreversibly schcarred," William said honestly.

"You might wanna shut up before your face...is."

Heh, William not only left the door wide open for that response, he practically laid a welcome mat for it.

[herbailiwick]

LOL true. :-)

Thanks for reading and commenting! <3

[misdreya]

Okay, I actually read this early this morning, but stuff was going on and I didn't have time to properly comment past "HEEE HEEE OMG HIGH SCHOOL AU

[herbailiwick]

THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THIS COMMENT. *snuggles*

I thought his take-chargeness with the beatings thing was really in-character. He's opposed to putting on the attitude that means he's letting people win. :-3

[herbailiwick]

Also...as the narrator I try not to be in a character's "point of view" unless I legitimately write it from a character's point of view, like with "I". So...this is me calling him William and saying he's not a good fighter?

[misdreya]

I thought that was really in character too! "I didn't get beat up, I did that guy a favor!" XD

As to the second comment, hmmmm. I had to go back and reread it a time or two because I wanted to try and put into words what had got me feeling like the story was being told from William's actual point of view. And I've come to the conclusion that the narrative was told with such a personal feel ("This sucked so hard.", "Big deal") that I got the impression it was being told from SORT OF his point of view.

I know there's a word for when the narrator doesn't use "I" or "We", but still connects with a certain character's thought processes enough to make it sound like it was being told by them.

I just can't remember what it is.

I'm thinking about this entirely too much, I doesn't matter in the slightest anyway. <33333333333

[deth_pinion]

Hahaha... just got around to reading this.
I loved the "You wanted to...compliment me?"
XD It's just such a Murderface thing to say. Completely missing the point.

On to chapter 2!

[herbailiwick]

HAHA Murderface. He was trying to figure Nathan out. Nathan in this story seems to be kind of vague and creative and non-specific by nature, and this Murderface seems to be like "I WILL FIGURE EVERYTHING OUT AND HOW IT FITS INTO EVERYWHERE" and Nathan's just like "I JUST WANNA HEAR A GUY TALK ABOUT GUNS!"

[cdrhom]

Poor William, there is a set pattern for beating him up. I like that he has completely misread Nathan's intent. And that he does enjoy his small victories.

[herbailiwick]

Thanks! William, as the smoke dope and bass-playing kid he said he was in high school, and the fact Stella treats him like a brat, strikes me as having been like this. Not a bad kid, just enthusiastic, assuming, intense. :-D

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[anonymous]

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