On time (!) drabble: Comparisons

[hendercats]

Crazy, wild, totally nutso day at work, in which we had four (five?) crises in the works simultaneously and no administrator in the building. Oh yeah, and that was all before 9am. Therefore, in addition to coffee and chocolate, pirate!fic was needed. Thank goodness for lunch breaks and (semi-)quiet rooms in which to check email and LJ. Likely I

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[geekmama]

Poor little Elizabeth, losing her mother and then reduced to thievery to retain the portrait! The details of its description are so beautiful, and the final line so very bittersweet. Very, very well done.

[hendercats]

Oh, pirate!Lizzie icon! Very nice!

Thanks for confirming my feeling that she did, indeed, steal the miniature. Earlier draft had her secreting it in her sewing basket (where no one would ever look, for we all know Elizabeth would have hated that type of handwork!), but specific mention of theft was deleted for the sake of brevity. I'm delighted to know you liked this.

[jenthegypsy]

Huzzah for you! On time, on subject and perfect length - not to mention real damn good!

...the tiny painting's translucent colors, the lifelike glow of her mother's face. What lovely imagery. And, of course, the glimpse of the Pirate Queen at such an early age in absolutely wonderful.

Then there is the last line, which is so very poignant. An emotional roller coaster contained in exactly 100 words - excellent!

(Thanks for posting this in order to distract me from the fact that it is *still* 20 minutes until THE FINALE. Please hurry up and make time fly for you as well - we'll need to talk tomorrow, after you've seen it. Can you say "SQUEEEE?)

[hendercats]

What lovely imagery.
*blushes* Thank you! I did a quick bit of online research about miniatures before starting this, to find out about materials, shape, timeframe and such. Found they were most often painted on wood, copper or ivory, and that the ivory, when combined with transparent pigments, resulted in a portrait that had a glowing appearance.

Delighted to have provided a bit of distraction while you waited for time to creep along, and I'm so glad you enjoyed this.

(Have you run off for the holiday weekend?)

[jenthegypsy]

Alas, no, I have not run off for the holiday weekend...WAIT! What holiday weekend? I did a side job for my own customer today (excellent pay, but still a 6 day work week), have tomorrow "off" (more unpacking, mowing, planting, organizing and bill paying) and then have to be one of 2 who works on Monday...plants, you know. Everybody needs them on the holiday! Off to nap now, (because when you are a grown-up, you can do that when you want to!) but would you like to have a "chat" sometime about Live Together, Die Alone? Or anything else, for that matter?

[hendercats]

Happy napping!

Would love to "chat" - sent (wait, think I sent *checks 'sent' folder* yup, it's there) you a middling-long email Thursday evening after watching - did it get lost in the ether somewhere? Let me know, I'll resend if necessary.

One of only two working on Monday? You're gonna be run ragged! Is it a large place?

[honorat]

Such a lovely little miniature in itself. Yay for Elizabeth starting out her life as one of the peas in a pod. And of course the poor little motherless girl should have that picture!

Then the oh-so-poignant moment when the young woman looks at the portrait of her mother and wishes for that maternal guidance in affairs of the heart that she has no opportunity to experience.

Sigh. Perfectly lovely.

[hendercats]

And of course the poor little motherless girl should have that picture!
Exactly. I think she rather needs it, really. As to her wishing for direction, it just felt right (even after 15 years, I still find myself wanting to share things with my mom).

Thanks so much for commenting on my little snippet. Am very happy you liked it.

[hereswith]

Great use of the theme. Elizabeth's misery in the first bit is quite understandable, why, indeed, should her aunt have the portrait, and you convey it very well with few words. And it's a really poignant ending, with her finally seeing the resemblance between them and wishing for her mother's opinion. Lovely!

[hendercats]

with her finally seeing the resemblance between them
I feel that her mother must have been a gentler, somewhat softer person than Elizabeth, and I saw the adult section as happening on her wedding day where she should be feeling soft and sweet herself, and so she can finally see the likeness.

Thank you so much for letting me know you liked this, I really appreciate it!

[torn_eledhwen]

I'm sure her mother did like him. Nice drabble.

[hendercats]

Oooh, another comment! *bounce* Yes, I agree that mom would have liked him, especially if he makes Elizabeth happy.

Love your icon!