ermmm... i don't remember killing koyama in this fic... but if you refer to him being a play boy and a host as well,i'm sorry... i just had to squeeze in every member and yamapi needs a back up...lol.
so yeah, if it's a crime than i'm guilty!!! *gets arrested*
eerrmm...i don't think it's that bad... why can't koyama be naughty just this once? heck, even massu acted like oikawa sosuke... it's OOC so just let it go ne?
uwah. i seriously cried here. i seriously need an angst icon. a pretty boy dies because of a misunderstanding. T.T anyway, i love angsty fics. so thanks for writing this one. lol. everyone is a slut dear. :D i'm still working on your b-day fic. :)
eehhh? damn, i love sosuke in the entrance of the song? the one with the contradiction and stuff like that... yeah,, i think that would make a really angsty icon!!! lol. emo!!!
aaahhh... why am i such in an emo mood this days? because of the rain maybe? lol.
for some unknown reason, i love that Yuya died. *please dun hate me* because he's always self-centred... Gosh, i know i was rite when i tot the girl with massu was u... a different side of SuShi fics that u make. Its good ne... Altho i'm so used to your Sushi fluffies, its refrshing reading the angst... Good attempt okies. personally, well u know me, i'm in love with kei, but to me, its ok here cos the main story of this fic is SuShi, rite? So its okie for kei's character to be like that(I love him more that way). and u didn't make kei the reason for Yuya's death so its alright here. Remember toma&pi&ryo? that was diff cos u make toma go away and pi go to ryo... am i clear?? LOL
do write more... i miss reading ur SuShi's fics...
eeehhh? maji de? and of course i will not hate you!!! ahaha... i've killed massu in the 10 songs meme and i felt guilty about it, ahaha... now it's tesshi's turn!!! *evil laugh*
ahaha... really? well then my friend, you have psychic powers! hurray!!! lol.
i'm glad to hear that from you... have you read the comments above? i really don't know why she *ahem* makes it such a big deal... naughty koyama is like erm... not impossible? boys are going to be boys... good boys or not in front of the camera... lol. i'm talking behind someone's back! (or should i make that comment?)
hai. will definitely write more sushi!!! another one will be coming up for massu's bday, so yeah...^_______^
i've read. That's why i mention in my comment. I love Kei more than SuShi.(oops) I would be the first to bash u(LOL) if u hurt Kei.(LOL okies i exagerate a bit there) A fic is a fic and its ooc so its okies. besides, if u keep on writing the members the same as the rl, wow, boring ne, its the same characteristic everytime but with different storyline... do i make sense?? i'm actually glad i decided to go to lj for my 30 mins break befre i continue with my assignment. :D its just so soothing to read ur fics... thanks. :D
dun worry honey.. dun be all so worked out.. i read the battle above.. and gosh.. just let them be.. seriously, people maybe see the fic as OOC, but i have to agree wit u that NONE of us know exactly their real personalities..
for me the fic is still believable (okay, maybe other than tesshi suicide).. and i see the fic as in AU situation.. so it's totally acceptable.. i somehow understand how u feel when people bashing u around like that without giving constructive criticisms..
i must say just let them be.. just remember that ur bday is coming!! that's more important than being all worked out with their comments..
Personally, I liked the story >3 I read better ones but there are many many many more which are worse >D' The only point that somehow struck me was how fast everthing happened... Just a suggestion, not any harsh criticism >< Maybe you could try to go more into detail when it comes to their feelings.. the whole thing seemed somehow rushed o,O' but otherwise the story would get soo much longer |D''
And to the OOC-thing from above.. Don't let that bother you that much ò,ó~ I mean, okay, maybe there were OOC.. somehow... a little bit... but hey, there are so many Fanfictions out there in which the characters were way more OOC >3 Maybe Koyama isn't a bad-ass and host and stuff... but he got tendencies.. |DDD And maybe if you had written more details about tegoshi's thoughts and emotions, there would have been more people understanding the situaton and not flaming hat much X__x I hope you understand what I mean >o< It's not against you.. really Q__Q~
i agree with you...the story seemed rushed...so Tesshi's action at the end was quite surprising...it wasn't explained very well how this action came about...suddenly, DIE!!!...hehehe...
nonetheless, it was done very well with its simplicity and honesty. The choice of words portrayed true and strong emotions thus giving the fic a somehow refreshed feeling...can't explain it very well, but i hope you get it... :)
this is what a constructive criticism looks like!!! ^______^ *cookies for you!!!*
anyway, yeah, i also think this is kind of rushed now that i look back on it... but i guess my main concern when i was writing this one is that it's supposed to be a one shot and so, yeah, i guess i got carried away...erm... i'll see what i can do about this... maybe i'll write an epilogue or something? i dunno, just so that evrything will be clear?
and don't worry, you definitely cheered me up!!! (loving your icon btw!! XD)
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but if you refer to him being a play boy and a host as well,i'm sorry...
i just had to squeeze in every member and yamapi needs a back up...lol.
so yeah, if it's a crime than i'm guilty!!! *gets arrested*
hope you aren't too mad with this...
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why can't koyama be naughty just this once?
heck, even massu acted like oikawa sosuke...
it's OOC so just let it go ne?
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i seriously need an angst icon.
a pretty boy dies because of a misunderstanding. T.T
anyway, i love angsty fics. so thanks for writing this one.
lol. everyone is a slut dear. :D
i'm still working on your b-day fic. :)
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many sosuke icons are angsty!!!
why don't you try one? ^____^
rofl.glad i'm not the only one!
ehh? you really did it?
arigatou gozaimasu!!! ^_____^
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lol. somehow angst fics. are more realistic since i can relate to them. :)
i told you i was going to make one didn't i? hehe. X3
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the one with the contradiction and stuff like that...
yeah,, i think that would make a really angsty icon!!! lol. emo!!!
aaahhh... why am i such in an emo mood this days?
because of the rain maybe? lol.
rain god massu, stop the rain already!!!
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*please dun hate me*
because he's always self-centred...
Gosh, i know i was rite when i tot the girl with massu was u...
a different side of SuShi fics that u make. Its good ne...
Altho i'm so used to your Sushi fluffies, its refrshing reading the angst...
Good attempt okies.
personally, well u know me, i'm in love with kei, but to me, its ok here cos the main story of this fic is SuShi, rite? So its okie for kei's character to be like that(I love him more that way).
and u didn't make kei the reason for Yuya's death so its alright here.
Remember toma&pi&ryo? that was diff cos u make toma go away and pi go to ryo... am i clear?? LOL
do write more... i miss reading ur SuShi's fics...
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and of course i will not hate you!!!
ahaha... i've killed massu in the 10 songs meme and i felt guilty about it, ahaha... now it's tesshi's turn!!! *evil laugh*
ahaha... really? well then my friend, you have psychic powers! hurray!!! lol.
i'm glad to hear that from you...
have you read the comments above?
i really don't know why she *ahem* makes it such a big deal...
naughty koyama is like erm... not impossible?
boys are going to be boys... good boys or not in front of the camera...
lol. i'm talking behind someone's back! (or should i make that comment?)
hai. will definitely write more sushi!!!
another one will be coming up for massu's bday, so yeah...^_______^
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That's why i mention in my comment. I love Kei more than SuShi.(oops) I would be the first to bash u(LOL) if u hurt Kei.(LOL okies i exagerate a bit there)
A fic is a fic and its ooc so its okies.
besides, if u keep on writing the members the same as the rl, wow, boring ne, its the same characteristic everytime but with different storyline...
do i make sense??
i'm actually glad i decided to go to lj for my 30 mins break befre i continue with my assignment. :D its just so soothing to read ur fics...
thanks. :D
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and yeah, it does make sense,
that's why these type of fics were invented, lol.
aaawww... thanks for the nice words ne? ^o^ chuu~!!!
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this is supposed to be a bday fic for myself!!!
i want to be happy with what i did.
why did you have to bash my work?!
so what if it's an original fiction or a fan fiction?
what difference does it make?!
in the end we're all just authors here with a wild imagination writing for a fandom.
why do you have to ruin everything?
if you don't appreciate what i did, then i'm not forcing you to.
constructive criticsms are appreciated but flaming like that?
come on! what's the big deal here anyway?
just NEWS not being themselves?
come on! as if we really know them personally to know what their real personality is!
and different authors have different ways of writing.
dammit. i got persecuted because i just don't know the difference between a fanfiction and an original fiction.
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i read the battle above.. and gosh.. just let them be..
seriously, people maybe see the fic as OOC, but i have to agree wit u that NONE of us know exactly their real personalities..
for me the fic is still believable (okay, maybe other than tesshi suicide).. and i see the fic as in AU situation.. so it's totally acceptable.. i somehow understand how u feel when people bashing u around like that without giving constructive criticisms..
i must say just let them be.. just remember that ur bday is coming!! that's more important than being all worked out with their comments..
love u hun.. <3
*hugs and kisses from me*
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and it's the second time it happened to me too!!! T^T
it's just so sad...
thankies for the hugs and kisses!!!
love u too!!! ^_____^
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Personally, I liked the story >3 I read better ones but there are many many many more which are worse >D'
The only point that somehow struck me was how fast everthing happened... Just a suggestion, not any harsh criticism >< Maybe you could try to go more into detail when it comes to their feelings.. the whole thing seemed somehow rushed o,O'
but otherwise the story would get soo much longer |D''
And to the OOC-thing from above..
Don't let that bother you that much ò,ó~
I mean, okay, maybe there were OOC.. somehow... a little bit... but hey, there are so many Fanfictions out there in which the characters were way more OOC >3
Maybe Koyama isn't a bad-ass and host and stuff... but he got tendencies.. |DDD
And maybe if you had written more details about tegoshi's thoughts and emotions, there would have been more people understanding the situaton and not flaming hat much X__x
I hope you understand what I mean >o< It's not against you.. really Q__Q~
I hope I'm able to cheer you up somehow ;____;~
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nonetheless, it was done very well with its simplicity and honesty. The choice of words portrayed true and strong emotions thus giving the fic a somehow refreshed feeling...can't explain it very well, but i hope you get it... :)
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*cookies for you!!!*
anyway, yeah, i also think this is kind of rushed now that i look back on it... but i guess my main concern when i was writing this one is that it's supposed to be a one shot and so, yeah, i guess i got carried away...erm... i'll see what i can do about this... maybe i'll write an epilogue or something? i dunno, just so that evrything will be clear?
and don't worry, you definitely cheered me up!!!
(loving your icon btw!! XD)
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