Smoking - Chapter 30

[heavenlyxflames]

Title:: Smoking
Genre:: Drama
Fandom:: RPS Vam, Villinde, Dugera, Lindunn, others.
Rating:: R
Summary:: A story, reaching back to the beginning like a twisted, curling whisp of smoke from a slow burning fire.
Disclaimer::Most characters are property only of themselves; I own the storyline and the writing. This is a work of ficiton; treat it as such

Comments

[thehomicidehoe]

Wow....

everything comes full circle now...

I love the way you write, its an amazing way to piece together a whole story,

wow.... I'm still in shock!

[thehomicidehoe]

Boo-ya!

FC! this is how much I love your writing

<(from here)------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------(to infinity and beyond!!!!!)

[oof_floof]

haha. why thank you <3

[lady_of_sadness]

wow.

i love how cold linde is, how he's finally stood up to ville and made him see just what he does. it's amazing what hurt will do to you, isn't it... and linde's been a victim of ville's bullshit for too long. i've been waiting for this chapter, knew it was coming, but you totally blew away my expectations. this was raw, and bitter, and angry. cold and calculating, the perfect contrast to the quietly suffering creature linde was up til now.

i just love this. in so many ways, for so many reasons. the entire opening, linde comparing ville to a preying insect just breathtakingly beautiful. you have such a way with words. so well done, i can't wait to see the rest. only a couple left now, yes?

ah well, i'll mourn the ending. then i'll reread it all over again. thank you for sharing this.

[oof_floof]

i was just rereading it and thinking, maybe it was too much of a change too quickly, but then i thought over it again and thought, eh, actually, it worked out, because everyone bursts sometimes. and at least he's not passionately angry... I think he's hurt too much to be passionately angry.

thank you darling, so much. <3 i love the comparison of people to insects, for some reason, so it comes up quite a lot when i write, but it just seems so poignant, especially for a character like ville's.

and yeah, theres just two left. :( *hugs* you're very welcome. thank you for your comments, they've made my world go around.

and that icon of lily is beautiful. gah.

[nerak_rose]

Please tell me what candescent means, because it isn't in my dictionary.. and it's even an oxford one. Bah.

Aaaaannywaay.. This was great as always. I don't even know what to say..

BUT, I was thinking the other day, and I really think you could get this published. Just alter the names and such a bit, you know, and then send it to some publishing agency. I'd buy it.

[oof_floof]

candescent is an adjective; it means "glowing with heat" but.... well. i figured it worked. and i love the way it sounds. candescent. gah.

thanks hon, i'm glad you liked it.

hahah. <3 yeah, lots of people say that about a lot of things i write... i guess I'm sort of considering it.. but then I get into a rut where I think, nah, it'd never work. I don't know how much of a market there is for homoerotic-esque things written by 17 year old girls. and i dont really want to change it to be a straight fic because i think it'd lose something.

but. yeah. theres some things that i'd consider sending in. But. welll. we'll see. i'll wait till im like, 18 or 19 and have a chance of a publisher taking me seriously. cuz seriously, who wants to publish a 17 year old's writing? lmao.

and btw. your icon of mice makes me wet myself every damn time i see it. he's GORGEOUS There. gah.

[nerak_rose]

Thanks. :) *adds to memory* lmao.

Nah, don't change it to a straight fic. I've read plenty of gay books here in DK, and they all had in common that they were published by this small agency, so I guess your chances would grow by that.

Hmm yeah I see the age problem, but really, if you don't mention your age when you send it in (I think it isn't neccessary, but different rules to different, places, yeah?) it might work. And, the age doesn't really matter if they like your work. I've read a book written by a 16-year old guy - the book itself wasn't that good, it was about puberty.. hah.

And why do I know.. because 4 years ago when I was 15 I wrote a book (a gay one) and sent it in, but they didn't want to publish it because of some things not working right (and looking back it def. hat it's bummers) but they also said that I could contact them when I had improved it, or if I wrote something better, because they liked my writing style and way of working the words, the characters, the plot and whatnot, but it just lacked a few

[oof_floof]

yeah... i just dont know how to go about it. and i don't live in an english speaking country and it's all. confused. lmao. maybe when i'm in uni in england next year, i'll try. i need to work at it too before its properly good enough for publishing and... yeah. there's that part of me that just doesnt believe it would work. *shrugs*

but yeah. well. we'll see.

when my exams are done, this summer, i'm going to turn myself to writing properly again. and. yeah. we'll see what comes of that.

lmao he's so pretty. gah. *pouts* las' hand is dead so we cant rp and its sadddd. :( and like. whattt mice with no hair? *blinks and stares*

[oanja]

OMG...

You just put everyone else trying to write into shame...

When you write a book I want to know about it so I can buy it. *nods*

[oof_floof]

*blushes*

thank you darling. <3

and.. yeah. i will. <33

[randomlove192]

I love how Linde finally grew some backbone. He said exactly what he wanted and didn't back down and now Ville's completely fucked over, as is everyone else. Sure, he's a bit of a selfish bastard, and you can see that and know that what they are all doing is wrong, but through that twisted web of lies and sex you know you've gotta root for someone. Really, this makes it seem like nothing else is worth reading, and nothing else is worth my time. I love you and hate you for it at the same time. But...love conquers all, yes? Haha, well, not in your story, but whatever you catch my drift. My point is, another mind-blowing chapter and I can't wait for your next update!

[oof_floof]

hahah. thank you darling. <33 more should be coming sometime soon. :)