[Fic] Pressure 0/?

[harmony283]

Yes this is what you think it is. :3

Chapter Title: And the Phone Goes Ring
Fandom: D. Gray Man
Pairing: eventual LaviYuu, Rhode x Allen, Tyki x Lavi, Cross x Allen, and way too many others to list atm
Rating: T for most chapters, but M for a few later on.
Summary: If it were simple enough to save someone, they would already be saved. If it were

Comments

[ashoakandthorn]

It's different, and I do like this version better. Feels more serious, and a better set up for what comes after.

[harmony283]

Ahah yeah it is. This is what I get when I'm actually serious about rewriting something XD though LJ and my internet gave me hell when I tried to upload it. But it's better now, so I can go and post/advertise this elsewhere...

I'm glad you liked it though/again :3 I shall try my best with the next chapters as well~

[keelain]

Aaaaah I never see the difference between rewrites unless it's pointed out to me or the grammar improves or something. I just wanted to comment that I've been reading this fic for the past week and I still don't know what's going on (at chapter 30 right now lol)

I do like the general feeling and characterizations in the fic but it always feels like you're hiding the plot and I'm so confused but here I go reading some more hohoho.

[harmony283]

Oh trust me you'd be able to tell with this one XD *unfortunately* though it might get a little more vague as the chapters go on. It depends really. I'm going to try and make it a little clearer though so--

Erm, what's your username on FF.net? Because this is why I ASK people to ask questions. Because if you don't--and you go for a long period of time, you will be confused. And I DO want to help. So it might be good for you to read it here? Because I'd ask you what you're confused on but that's a lot to cover even for me ^^; but if you want to try? (via PM would probably be better *posted this elsewhere with a link, so I don't want to run the risk of spoiling someone ^^; )

though again the confusion is intentional, but I can hopefully make it a bit clearer so you can grasp onto certain points and know they connect to each other?/Etc. Because--I mean I said in a journal once *when I was uploading the most recent chapter* that I was even confused XD so it'll probably help me out too. *nods*

[keelain]

Oh I'm keelain on ff.net too but I haven't reviewed yet mainly because... I always review on the most recent chapter only if I like the fic ah hahaha... that's a horrible policy but I get really embarrassed after I move on to another fandom or after I wake up in the morning because usually what I like is quite stupid.

Anyway I guess I'll reread your rewrite on LJ from now on. Now I must go find a new epic multichapter fic gaaah.

[harmony283]

Well especially if I said multiple times to ask if you're confused. I've had people ask any range of questions and I've always answered them o.o *if that's what you mean by feeling silly/etc*

That doesn't mean I'm going to stop updating on FF.net XD as I said before the difference between the rewrite and the original will probably shrink as time goes on, until they're basically the same fic. It'll just be updates slower on here (like the first chapters)--so I meant that as in if you had questions centering around a certain chapter that it might be best if you re-read them on here, and then asked. That way we both have our memories refreshed XD

[hakasha]

*finally got around to reading this*

Yay for rewritten chapters! To be honest, I can't remember how the original chapter was anymore (could go read it on FF.net, but- not really much time for that now) so i can't really offer a comparison. I did enjoy the chapter, though. I got one or two little flashbacks, like, "oh, yeaaaaaaah, there was a scene like this in the beginning...." xD