Ooh! Oooh, very, very clever. I *love* the way your mind works. Such a detail to notice and then craft into a really compelling story. Wow, you never cease to impress me with your work. And this --
This, this is how he shows me that I belong to him. As if I needed to be shown.
Thank you, Anne! I'm so glad you liked it! I have to admit, though, I totally made up the detail about the bracelet... That's why I made it a really thin one-it sort of makes its existence in the story a bit more plausible, since we never actually saw it on the show. *bg*
Glancing down, I had just enough time to notice that it was a spidery-thin silver bracelet before the sight of Shemin's hand pumping my cock made me come all over his shirt
What a way to open a story. LOL
The next time I saw it, it was lying on my pillow. It had been placed there carefully, curled into a circle precisely in the center.
This is such a Keller mindfuck thing to do. An after dinner mint on Toby's pillow. And you said you couldn't get into Keller's mind anymore. PShaw.
He had stopped before fleeing the scene and taken it off him, because teaching me a lesson was more important than anything else, even more important than evading capture. This, this is how he shows me that I belong to him. As if I needed to be shown.
Damn, this is chilling and perfect.
My face went hot as his lips just barely brushed the margin of my ear, and I snatched the headphones away from him and jumped to my feet. He was still leaning way forward in his chair, shirt and sweatshirt riding up to expose the last few bumps of his spine. I
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This is such a Keller mindfuck thing to do. An after dinner mint on Toby's pillow. And you said you couldn't get into Keller's mind anymore. PShaw.
Well, every once in a while I can describe stuff he would *do*, but I have a hell of a time trying to put his thoughts into words. I'm glad you thought this was plausible, though!
Ok, I need to see this scene. Like right fucking now. LOL And Waaaaaah, poor Keller.
LOL, I know what you mean. If it were up to me, we would have seen a lot more scenes like this on the show (you know, in the tradition of the "Your brother's cute; does he like to fool around?" scene).
Also, I like to make Keller touch himself. *g*
And this is just the perfect ending. It just hurts so good.
Thank you! You know how I have trouble writing endings, so I'm glad to hear that this worked.
Thank *you*! I'm really glad you liked it! I was definitely going for some sort of mix of vicious and delicious, so I'm very happy to hear it came across that way. And thank you for giving us such an interesting challenge this month! (Leave it to the two of us to come up with such twisted "gifts" LOL.)
Damn, A, this is fantastic. I can so see Keller doing something like this. I like how it sickens Toby, and yet he knows he won't use it against Keller. And the end with Chris's smile not being smug is perfect. Excellent entry.
Thanks, Cat! I've always thought the way Toby reacted to the things Chris did was kind of...interesting. LOL. He obviously still loved him throughout that season, no matter what happened, and I think it must have been a big internal conflict for him to have to watch what went down during the "fandango."
I liked it entirely, Actizera! Awww, S4 good days, when even Adebisi was alive, I miss them! But I just loved this part ...a souvenir of yet another death connected to the way I had lived my life, the choices I had made. So Toby, always feeling all the guilt of the world... really good job, girl!
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This, this is how he shows me that I belong to him. As if I needed to be shown.
-- was just :-0 I have no words.
Excellent job!
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What a way to open a story. LOL
The next time I saw it, it was lying on my pillow. It had been placed there carefully, curled into a circle precisely in the center.
This is such a Keller mindfuck thing to do. An after dinner mint on Toby's pillow. And you said you couldn't get into Keller's mind anymore. PShaw.
He had stopped before fleeing the scene and taken it off him, because teaching me a lesson was more important than anything else, even more important than evading capture. This, this is how he shows me that I belong to him. As if I needed to be shown.
Damn, this is chilling and perfect.
My face went hot as his lips just barely brushed the margin of my ear, and I snatched the headphones away from him and jumped to my feet. He was still leaning way forward in his chair, shirt and sweatshirt riding up to expose the last few bumps of his spine. I ( ... )
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Well, every once in a while I can describe stuff he would *do*, but I have a hell of a time trying to put his thoughts into words. I'm glad you thought this was plausible, though!
Ok, I need to see this scene. Like right fucking now. LOL And Waaaaaah, poor Keller.
LOL, I know what you mean. If it were up to me, we would have seen a lot more scenes like this on the show (you know, in the tradition of the "Your brother's cute; does he like to fool around?" scene).
Also, I like to make Keller touch himself. *g*
And this is just the perfect ending. It just hurts so good.
Thank you! You know how I have trouble writing endings, so I'm glad to hear that this worked.
Excellent work, my dear.
Thanks, Mav! I'm so happy you enjoyed it! : )
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I'm glad you enjoyed it! : )
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...a souvenir of yet another death connected to the way I had lived my life, the choices I had made.
So Toby, always feeling all the guilt of the world... really good job, girl!
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Thanks for the feedback! I'm glad you liked it! : )
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