Comments | hardtime100: HT100 Challenge #24-Cut!: Shot to the Heart

rileyc in hardtime100

HT100 Challenge #24-Cut!: Shot to the Heart

Sep 14, 2003 11:54

A moment in time with Toby, from one of my favorite fade-to-black moments ( Read more... )

ch 024 cut!, w: rileyc

Comments 10

alinewrites September 14 2003, 19:29:34 UTC

Oh my god! It's just wonderfully heartbreaking! I love so much when you write canon things!

rileyc September 16 2003, 17:09:06 UTC

That is one thing I completely love about these HT challenges, that they make me focus on dealing with canon. It would have been awfully easy to drift away from that completely otherwise.

Glad you liked, Aline, thanks.

tobyfan September 14 2003, 21:25:17 UTC

awww *sniff* my poor baby! He needs a hug.

nicely done, r.

rileyc September 16 2003, 17:06:19 UTC

He does. And we know he gets a really nice one eventually, don't we? Thanks, Anne.

rowanfairchild September 15 2003, 12:44:19 UTC

Mmm, I really like the kind of stream-of-consciousness flow and feel to this -- nice way to capture the feeling of confusion and worry.

rileyc September 16 2003, 16:56:22 UTC

Thank you. I wasn't sure the stream of consciousness thing would work, but it felt like the only way to capture those few frantic moments.

lisacali September 19 2003, 05:51:53 UTC

Yep, I agree with Rowan, it was a great choice to go with here. This was wonderful to read, it just sucked me in.

rileyc September 20 2003, 15:47:37 UTC

And thank you again. Maybe it's the hurt/comfort junkie in me, but that's one of my favorite incidents to wonder about. :/

Well, it's not like I don't spend a lot of time pondering NYE, too.

maverick4oz September 20 2003, 18:07:20 UTC

I adore the cadence of this Rebecca. You have captured the terror and franticness that Toby must have felt. Really wonderful work. Thanks.

rileyc September 20 2003, 20:13:55 UTC

You're welcome. It was a tough one, but it's a moment I can't leave alone.