Comments | halfshellvenus: Original Fiction: "Destination Nowhere"

halfshellvenus

Original Fiction: "Destination Nowhere"

Nov 18, 2015 10:59

Title: Destination Nowhere
Fandom: Original Fiction
Rating: PG
Summary: Are we there yet?
Author's Notes: For the writerverse "All-Dialogue" challenge ( Read more... )

original_fiction, writerverse, my_fic, all_dialogue

Comments 4

tsuki_no_bara November 19 2015, 05:34:15 UTC

i love "you've been yammering at me like your 'off' button's broken". i like the twist at the end, too, altho maybe roswell should've clued me in....

halfshellvenus November 19 2015, 08:07:50 UTC

I sometimes feel that way with our son-- "Where is the mute button?!?"

Roswell is all fun and games until aliens take over your body... :O

lacygrey March 2 2016, 14:17:02 UTC

Hi,(here from writerverse library). You've got a cunning twist here: The Alien who passed himself off as a (rather) dumb human, but he does the lingo fine so we're all taken in along with his 'pal' Mike.

Its a cute take on the body snatchers - unless Mike is about to get eaten or abducted, of course - but one does wonder what 'Jeremy' is planning to do next. And whether Mike even believes he's not just goofing around.

halfshellvenus March 2 2016, 19:49:46 UTC

:D There's no way to know whether the alien has sinister intentions, or whether he's just messing with Mike because he can. Will he drag Mike off in a spaceship, now that he's had his fun? Or find another victim?

One of the Hitchhiker's Guide novels mentions teenaged aliens going to more primitive planets just to freak out the locals, and I can really see that happening. :D

Thanks for reading and commenting!