LJ Idol Season Nine: "Greensboro Woolworth's, 1960"

[halfshellvenus]

Greensboro Woolworth's, 1960
lj idol season nine | week four | 157 words
“Nobody can ride your back if your back's not bent” (Dr. Martin Luther King, Jr

Comments

[muchtooarrogant]

I really liked the refrain you used here. It was a perfect match for the description of the haters this movement struggled against. Well done!

Dan

[halfshellvenus]

I almost never use a refrain, but it really drove the direction of the poem here-- for exactly the reason you mentioned.

Thanks for reading!

[muchtooarrogant]

I know what you mean, too often a refrain is used like a crutch. The dual repetition here was perfect, just enough to make your point, and no more. :)

Dan

[bleodswean]

Wow! This is a really strong and literal take on the prompt and it works perfectly.

This line - The law counts for nothing. is fantastic. And this - We will not beg for what you never had to earn. say so much economically. Of course!!!

Great work here.

[halfshellvenus]

When I saw that quote, I knew exactly what it meant, and after thinking about it... I decided I had to write that. It was such an important time, and should not be forgotten!

[bleodswean]

*nods* It was discouraging how many, probably younger, folks didn't immediately recognize the quote.

[halfshellvenus]

Well, the Civil Rights' movement is also very particular to the U.S., so I imagine that people from other countries are less familiar with all of that history. Still, the changes it brought are worth knowing about, I think!

[ohelectricshock]

LOVED this. This is so powerful, it hit me like a punch to the chest.

[halfshellvenus]

Thank you! I was hoping it would really put people in the moment, and make them feel the strength of the narrator.

[adoptedwriter]

So powerful. Lovely writing. AW

[halfshellvenus]

Thank you very much!

[eska818]

Lovely, well-written. :)

[halfshellvenus]

Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it. :)