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[ChallengeFic] Blue Moon

Feb 09, 2009 09:30

Title: Blue Moon
Author: Terra aka Conniferous
Characters: Duo
Warning/Rating: Suicide themes, strong language, T
Status: Complete
Summary: Duo learns to stop waiting.

I know it's Quatre month but seeing as it's February, I thought Duo deserved some love. There can never be too much Duo going around.

( When I got to this orbiting hellhole, they pumped me so full of drugs I thought they’d mistaken me for a cancer patient. )

challenge: no options left, duo, author: terravayne, mild violence, suicide, fiction

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theoriginal_ist February 9 2009, 17:23:27 UTC

Aw. ::sniffles:: This is really good. I'd say "sweet" but that probably sounds wrong. Lol. I love the whole flow of it, the back-and-forth of present-to-flashbacks-to-present again and the language is wonderful. The whole thing is fantastic. Great job!

terravayne February 9 2009, 18:04:18 UTC

Thanks! It's my first attempt at writing Duo seriously so I'm glad you liked it. For some reason, I identify better with Heero, Quatre and Trowa so Duo and Wufei are always a struggle. Ah, annoying shifting timeframes. That's awesome that it wasn't confusing. I think I'm finally starting to get the hang of present-tense writing. It can be such a pain! As always, thank you for reading.

theoriginal_ist February 9 2009, 18:11:09 UTC

Lol. I know what you mean, present-tense can be so annoying. I always have to reread when I write it and I still miss half my mistakes. Ah, well. What can I say. But, anyway, I think this was an excellent first attempt at writing Duo seriously. (really, this is your first attempt at that???). Lol.

terravayne February 9 2009, 18:20:09 UTC

I know!! I edited this like a trillion times after I posted it because I kept noticing mistakes. And it's like...if you're thinking in the present about what someone meant when they said something in the past, which tense is it!?! @_@ But yeah, I never touch Duo if I can help it because I can't get into his head. Comedy situations? Sure, he just cracks jokes and grins a lot but something serious? That's a different ballgame. But I thought about the prompt and decided to suck it up.

Haha, actually, on that note, I have to credit you for inspiring so much love for Mariemaia in me that she's going to feature more prominently in everything I write from now on. ^_^

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ederyn February 9 2009, 18:30:09 UTC

Ooooh! Very well written, dude! It's so hard to write a fic about an OC and make the reader actually care about him (or at least it is for me) but I grew to like Ray in the course of this story, and feel so sad at the end. Like, there but for the grace of God goes Duo. Waaaaaah! *wishes I had a Duo avatar now*

terravayne February 10 2009, 00:09:58 UTC

Oh, thank you! At first, Ray was just this potty-mouthed vet to me but he really started growing on me as I was writing. This was inspired by more soldier fatalities from suicide than from enemy fire in January. Yet another veteran's affairs scandal - wasn't the abysmal VA hospital conditions enough? Sigh. It definitely is hard making an OC and not churning out a Stu/Sue. I see Ray as who Duo could have become had he been older and fighting on the other side. Thanks for reading!

pfmoi February 13 2009, 09:44:07 UTC

You did a REALLY good job with this. I almost didn't read it, but the teaser line hooked me. Ray was...incredible. He and Duo really ARE quite the pair and I like the way you did them. I'm also always terribly amused when an author admits one of their characters made them take a second look.

terravayne February 13 2009, 20:23:19 UTC

Thanks so much. Yay for teaser lines! Haha, I think Ray became my favorite OC over the course of this story. I know people tend to run away when there are OCs so I wanted to make him real. I'm so glad you liked them as a pair. Thank you for reading!

cozzybob February 10 2009, 03:23:57 UTC

Oooooooooooh! This was excellent! It's been so long since I've read a decent Duo, I mean, with the seriousness and full reading of his character beyond the first glimpses and OMG I think I love you!!! *squish* Dude, this was awesome, thank you so much for writing and posting it! It made my day. It pretty much contains everything I love, right here. ^^

Yay for Ray, too! That was an excellent OC, which is not easy to pull off. His dialog was perfect! And I love how he was on the Alliance, it's like peering at the other side of the fence. Man, this was awesome!

*loves and loves and loves*

terravayne February 10 2009, 06:06:33 UTC

Yay, thanks!! I'm so glad you liked Duo and Ray. They're quite the pair, that's for sure. And Duo? Duo is just a bottomless pit of potential characterizations. To be honest, serious!Duo intimidates me because it's like, how do I write him without fishing for laughs? And yes! It is like "peering at the other side of the fence" because I see Ray as who Duo could've been in another life. Thank you for this lovely comment! It's really made my night.

cozzybob February 10 2009, 11:20:13 UTC

Oooh! Yeah, that's why I like Duo so much (although I do like the other characters as well). Once you tap into his head, there's an explosion of potential, and it gets addicting really fast. To be honest, I prefer Duo serious, and it's mostly how I write him (with the occasional crack thrown in). It took me years to get the courage to do that, though, which I got beyond by RPing him. ^^;

He's just a very complicated character who's so many things at the same time, and while a lot of fans seem to take him at face value (even if they claim to worship him), I don't think a lot of people actually understand him. Which is funny when you think about it. Next to Trowa & Wufei, I think he's one of the most challenging characters in the verse. Hee!

Yay for making your night!! This made my night as well, and I really appreciate it! :D

basilton February 10 2009, 06:51:08 UTC

I always like serious Duo characterisations, because it's so hard to keep him serious without resorting to cheap laughs. The real trick is to balance his humour and his seriousness. Me? I get carried away with crack. >.

terravayne February 10 2009, 07:17:14 UTC

It is definitely hard to keep him serious and not play him off for laughs. I see the dark version of him as having an addictive personality, be it humor or drugs. Haha, and there's nothing wrong with crackfics. Nothing at all. Thanks for reading!

schizoid_sprite February 10 2009, 07:11:28 UTC

Waaaa!! Good one! XD
I like to see this fic as one of my guides to write a proper Duo fic. Heeheehee!! Love this. Powerful.

I always like how you end your fics. *wink*

terravayne February 10 2009, 07:22:07 UTC

Does that mean you're expanding beyond 4xD? So long as you don't forget our one true pairing I'm excited to read to whatever character you tackle next. Awww, that means a lot that you like my endings. I usually end stronger than I begin. Haha, it's due to utter lack of planning when I write flashfics or oneshots. I just sit down at my computer and spew out words. By the last paragraph, I've usually gotten the hang of the story. But I almost never go back to change the beginning. Heh. Thank you for reading!

schizoid_sprite February 10 2009, 11:49:39 UTC

**gives you a 4xd icon**

waaaaaaaa!

Of course, I won't! I love them too much to be forgotten that easily, haha. Thanks, I'm still in the process of squeezing my way into the mind of other characters. XD

not just endings! I love it wholly. Say, the gestalt principle applies here. wohahahah!!
Ilovehowyouwrite. Seriously! :D

terravayne February 11 2009, 03:44:13 UTC

Whoa. That's an AMAZING 4xD icon. Er...may I steal it for my LJ? :shifty eyes:

^_^

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