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Brigits_Flame Feb.Week One
Feb 03, 2012 16:09
Title: Keeping Warm
Prompt: "Thank you"
Word Ct: 830
A/N: Short, sweet, no warnings
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jem0000000
February 4 2012, 01:22:41 UTC
Awwww! How cute! :)
One thing -- in the second paragraph, you refer to a bundle on his back, but you call it a pack for the remainder of the story.
I love the way you've worked in tiny hints about his past, and the detailed descriptions of the things that matter to him. :)
And I like that he refuses to abandon his dog. :)
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greenwillow27
February 4 2012, 02:29:01 UTC
Ah yes. Good point. I should keep that consistent. I think it was because his bundle didn't morph into a backpack until I needed him to unzip a zipper...;o)
Thank you, Jem, as always, for the feedback! Truly appreciate it!
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jem0000000
February 4 2012, 02:36:35 UTC
Lol, I thought it might be one of those morphing sorts of bundles! ;)
You're welcome. It was fun to read. :)
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greenwillow27
February 5 2012, 03:26:56 UTC
Thank you!
=oD
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belluminabyssus
February 6 2012, 02:07:49 UTC
Aw, how poignant and sweet -- I'm a sucker for animal stories. Good luck this week!
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greenwillow27
February 7 2012, 03:27:51 UTC
Thank you! I actually tend to avoid animal stories cuz they always make me cry. But this one kinda wrote itself.
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keppiehed
February 6 2012, 02:17:46 UTC
The end was perfect. He was so kind! Excellently done.
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greenwillow27
February 7 2012, 03:30:17 UTC
Thank you!
I should probably post the photo that gave me the ending, but then it'd be pretty obvious how little "writing" I did. ;o)
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oryginal_skin
February 12 2012, 21:13:00 UTC
Yeah, the ending was especially good.
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greenwillow27
February 7 2012, 03:31:14 UTC
Thank you!
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One thing -- in the second paragraph, you refer to a bundle on his back, but you call it a pack for the remainder of the story.
I love the way you've worked in tiny hints about his past, and the detailed descriptions of the things that matter to him. :)
And I like that he refuses to abandon his dog. :)
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Thank you, Jem, as always, for the feedback! Truly appreciate it!
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You're welcome. It was fun to read. :)
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=oD
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I should probably post the photo that gave me the ending, but then it'd be pretty obvious how little "writing" I did. ;o)
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