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Yuletide Potions

Dec 25, 2007 23:02

Title: Yuletide Potions XX
Team: Order of the Phoenix
Word Count: 12 x 100
Rating: all ages (G)
Challenges: Comfort and Joy, Broken Memory Charm
Characters: Severus, Hermione, Monica, Wendell

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Part XIX

*****Hermione felt her heart quicken at the change in her mother’s voice, but it was followed by a surge of alarm as Monica ( Read more... )

comfort and joy challenge, order_rr, broken memory charm challenge, keladry_lupin

Comments 36

a_bees_buzz December 26 2007, 14:04:08 UTC

Home again, home again, jiggety-jig.

Indeed! I don't see Australian summer by the beach as Severus' natural environment. It's very appropriate for them to go home before anything else develops. I particularly like the way you portrayed Hermione's mixed feelings and her growing dependence on Severus.

keladry_lupin December 26 2007, 22:23:52 UTC

I did think about keeping them in Gerringong through Christmas, and I had written a beach scene of the Wendell/Severus conversation that made Severus slightly uncomfortable, but I decided to keep it all from Hermione's point of view, this time. So the drabble got chucked.

Thanks, Buzzy!

ginny_weasley31 December 26 2007, 17:20:51 UTC

Oh, very lovely set, Kel. Just wonderful. :)

~taps chin with finger~

What to do... what to do?

keladry_lupin December 26 2007, 22:24:44 UTC

*hugs you* You're clever; I have no doubt it'll be delightful, whatever you choose to write!

firefly124 December 26 2007, 23:10:20 UTC

Wonderful! I love that you had it work, but not perfectly. That's so much more real, and does leave Hermione having to deal with being forgiven when it isn't all just magically (heh) better. And how she doesn't yet realize he is "her" Severus, or shall be soon, and the hints of what Wendell must have said to him while they were outside ... I just love it!

keladry_lupin December 27 2007, 06:55:09 UTC

Forgiveness, when when you're the one being forgiven but the wrong is not undone, can be difficult to accept. It's that whole lousy guilt thing.

I'm glad you liked this; thank you!

duniazade December 26 2007, 23:24:54 UTC

"And bring your Severus again.”

Oh so perceptive (and prescriptive) Monica, thank you!

Delicate and lovely, with nice realistic touches.

keladry_lupin December 27 2007, 06:55:52 UTC

Thank you very much!

droxy December 27 2007, 00:29:45 UTC

Snape wants her home for a different reason and I suspect Xmas eve will be a busy day for them. Someone needs to confont Umbridge still- a little Slytherin justice perhaps? Somone still has to write the romantic smut though. LOL

keladry_lupin December 27 2007, 06:58:02 UTC

I'm not sure if he's allowing himself to think beyond closing time on Christmas Eve -- it will be a busy day, after all. Or perhaps he's just afraid of what the evening might hold. *grin*